my perfect man:)

guitar strumming

sitting in a bar stool

what a wonderful melody played

my voice fit right with him

what a dream he will be

if he will only exist

 

all this time

sitting in a class room

a guy with a tie charmed me

now, he is past to me

i prefer my guitar guy

my perfect man

Author's Note

inspired by seeing my 23 yeard old cousin sing and play and thts when i relaize i prefer a guy with a guitar than a tie so bye bye troy you are no longer in my heart . now i know how my perfect guy will be like ;0

Reviews

[nevermindfan1991]

I really liked this poem, very creative and interesting. Wouldn't we all prefer a guy with a guitar than a tie. I liked your imagery, and the poem is written so simply, but means a lot more than it seems to. I loved reading this, I imagine this could be read at coffee shop poetry contest or something like that. Well, anyway really liked this poem!

[marleywhite]

how about a guy with a guitar and a tie?

[The Analog Kid]

Showing some love to us musicians. Nice:)

[Muse]

Could this be the next Taylor Swift song! A compliment for your generation. Write on. :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

(*_*)
ahem!
Guitarists just seem romantic initially...
the moment of truth arrives when they run off with their own guitar,
and leave their woman alone to search em to the star.

[Christina May Shanaberg]

Oh, I forgot to tell you that I loved this write and love reading such wonderful pieces from our young writers!

[Christina May Shanaberg]

The best men in life have something to offer to the world and aren't just looking for what they can take away. Life might look easier with money, but quality is what gives us life. I found out, long ago, the man who can build something is better than the man paying for it to be built!

[K. Blake]

ah, I agree, what a perfect man guitar men can make!

[Hello, Goodbye]

great imagery and usage of brevity.. nice compact write..

[Dreamer]

hmmm i would definitely trade a tie but maybe for drums.lol Seriously though I find that this is a fun poem. Will lighten the mood. I like the structure of the line "...a guy with a tie charmed me now, no more, he is past to me..." the only thing i would suggest is that u remove the comma between now and no because it breaks up the line and could cause what ur saying to be lost (especially if the reader isnt paying attention). Or u could keep the comma but remove "no more" since we get the idea when u say " he is past to me"- i would personally do this. :)

[Daytonight]

I think I sense that you are after a more romantic and artistic man than a business stuffy suit type. That is truly a great dream. Hang on to it and don't give up!