A Complaint

Weird Write prompt....Write about a heart broken in two's and it's point of view

The owner of this vessel

is reckless.

She throws me around

like trash.

I get beaten and kicked

all over the place,

 no appreciation

at all for beauty;

what I use to possess,

before you broke me in two

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

This poem is a short, sharp, shock. It's very clever. For me, it initially captures the feeling that most of us have had at some point, for a moment or two, where we personify a car, perhaps, or a boat, and we wonder about the long and possibly troubled life that "vessel" has had. I think we've all felt a pang of sympathy for an inanimate object, like a car, that looks a little battered and is perhaps disrespected by the owner. Here, you give us that feeling, and then you apply it to the human heart. It's a really clever perspective, because you make the reader firstly disconnect from themselves (or their heart as a part of them), and then from that disconnected point of view, you make us feel the sympathy that we would perhaps feel for a stranger, a sympathy that we could never normally apply to ourselves. That's very clever and makes for a very insightful, perceptive, unusual poem. It's certainly a "heartfelt" plea! I'm favorite-ing this :-)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

intensely stirring~

[nono]

Very nice, interesting, and well written. A wonderful poem, short, sweet, and to the point. I love the words you used to describe the feeling. That's amazing. Can't wait for more!!

[Wondering Mind]

Heart Breaks are self inflicted, yes...Nice take.