A Paradise of Sparrows

I'd like to be a sparrow, if I did have a next life...

Hey little chubby fellows, 

you aren’t aware of this stranger 

who’s been drawn close 

to marvel at your natural 

beauty, small and delicate coat, 

the white and brown circular 

streaks on your feathers, 

appearing and disappearing, 

like festive lights they flicker 

among rows of Forsythia.

 

Hundreds of wings flapping, 

elevating and plunging 

together, chasing one another, 

playing hide-and-seek, 

Exchanging gifts. 

 

Landing on tops of neatly 

trimmed yellow hedges, 

skipping swiftly  

on fresh leafy edges, 

springing cheerfully 

up and down bouncy branches. 

 

Your boisterous chatter  

betrays your clever camouflage. 

Your joyous clamours  

amaze the curious onlooker. 

Your agility, more exuberant 

than the lukewarm sun, 

lightens a heart burdened  

with chores and errands. 

 

May your vibrancy enliven 

this quiet neighborhood. 

May I become a little one 

in a flock of beckoning youth. 

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

You give the impression of enjoying life, of making time to search the All Around to see those cheeky sparrows. How well you'v e noticed thr way they look, how they move and more. Hpw wondrerfully y ; you've found their characters, energy, their joy. You seem to be a sparrow expert who loves her 'job'!'

Your words stroke the mind, bring calm and happiness to what could be a dark day. Many thanks for sharing your obvious pleasure You should be made a special member of the Sparrow Society!

[Louisa Chan]

Thank you very much for your “joyous” review. I appreciate it!
L

[emmajoygreen]

Was and is a great pleasure :)

[emmajoygreen]

Just re-read this because a dense hedgerow on my land has been overwhelmed with sparrows over almost a year, certainly frantically since I left you my review. I love watching sparrows, they are like mischievous and inquisitive wee beings. Thank you for reminding me of your wonderful poem, yet again. :)

[Louisa Chan]

Thank you for your kind comment Emma!
I love sparrows very much too - they look so ordinary and yet extraordinary : )
I hope you continue to enjoy their presence around you.
Louisa

[Davidgeo]

A sign of an outstanding writer is the ability to describe something like anything else with similar affect.

Kinda like describing color without using any of the words (like blue, etc....)

It's difficult to do, well done.

[Louisa Chan]

Thank you for your kind review Davidgeo!
Louisa

[Ken e Bujold]

Louisa you have certainly captured the flight of a sparrow with your lyrical gem of a poem. very much enjoyed the read

Ken

[Louisa Chan]

Thank you very much Ken.
Wishing you a nice day, free as a bird!
L

[Im His Daughter]

Awww what a sweet little poem. I have budgies & they just sing & chirp all day long. Good write!

[Louisa Chan]

Thank you for your kind review : )
Have a beautiful day!
L

[Betty Hermelee]

Seems if you could become a sparrow in your next life, you would. Very soft and lovely descriptions of these tiny birds. You would think they might camouflage except for their boisterous cackles. You go into great detail about how they appear... their behavior and how much you enjoy them. They seem to light up a neighborhood.... and enlighten the soul. Nice write.
Best, Betty

[Louisa Chan]

Thank you very much for your review Betty.
Yes, I love small creatures, especially these little chubby sparrows. Not many people in my neighbourhood would cast an eye on them, but to me they are the most beautiful souls, both on the outside and inside : )
L

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome!
Best
Betty

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Much like a beautiful bird that lands just outside the window... one could miss the brilliance of this piece, if they were to move to it too quickly. Fantastic write, and wonderful execution.

[Louisa Chan]

Thanks Travis for your appreciation!
L

[Lisasview]

Hi Louisa,
First poem I have read of yours..Funny I should be reading one today as my husband and I were just saying that our first year living in Spain 2021 that we saw and heard no birds but recently the birds have appeared.. Mot likely because of the huge on going rain would had for over month...
We love birds and listening to them is wonderful.
I enjoyed your poem..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Louisa Chan]

Thank you very much Lisa. Have a nice day!
Louisa

[Lisasview]

You are very wecome!
Lisa

[Chris Shaw]

Wonderful poetic expression here. Our feathered friends are not only a delight to look at but make fabulous poems too. Really enjoyed the description, colour and texture in this write. Well penned Louisa. I am a great fan of our avian friends.

Chris

[Louisa Chan]

Thank you Chris. They often Bring me peace and great joy. Wishing the same for you. Love, Louisa

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Louisa… I also am inspired by the fortitude of such feathered friends.. who Grace our life with Song 🎶 and could quite possibly be Spirits sent by Heaven above. I do believe that Poetry could be a Miracle to bring all people of this Earth together to Save Nature and the Beauty thereof. Amen. Blessings to you and yours. tenderly, Pat

[Louisa Chan]

Thank you so much for your appreciation Patricia.
I’m Writing a song in praise
of nature right now ha ha. Hope you have a great day with our nature friends.
Love,
L

[JE Falcon]

Ah, sparrows, finches, and all their other cousins. I marvel at their antics and especially love watching them take a bath at our birdbath. --- This was a delightful poem that flowed well and kept my interest all the while. --- Thanks.

[Louisa Chan]

I'm blessed enough to be surrounded by these feathered fellows in where I live. I see them courting one another and building nests together. They are utterly adorable!