we should break up

we should break up

all i think about is those girls
the ones you always gave rides to
they hugged you a little too tight
i think about the girls you used to ditch me for
“babe i’ll be back in a couple hours”
those couple hours turned into all day

i think about the times i wanted to go on a date
the ones where we smile and laugh
act like our relationship is perfect
the ones that make me forget about the screaming
i want to go on a date because that’s what happens in a relationship

but the time is getting less and less
tonight is the fourth night with a goodnight text
today is eight days since we’ve gone out together
maybe tomorrow will be the second time we break up
but maybe this break up will be for good

Author's Note

i write when i’m sad, and right now i’m sad. so i wrote this. it’s not perfect and i’m not a writer. just a girl who wants to write for herself

Reviews

[emipoemi]

You definitely express the emotion in a heavy and heart-wrenching way, that we can actually feel your pain. In that, you have succeeded. The way in which you repeat lines at the beginning of the stanzas is perfectly executed as well. Now, if you imply you simply write to vent and acknowledge yourself to not be a writer (although you do have the spark and makings of one), I won't go into heavy detail in the ways in which you could improve this piece (all writers gotta start somewhere). This is a good piece overall, and sorry about your sorrow (the best poetry, I believe, is actually written when one is sad). :)

[KCthelastboyscout]

This won't be easy.it might be three or four times breaking up.a couple of times getting back together in between.love is not easy letting go.it shouldn't be.you work so hard to find it