Thoughts that bleed..

Thoughts that bleed..

A Story by Chris D.

Don't try and get inside my mind, for I've been trying to escape since the day I was conceived.. Unfortunately even before I could see, I tasted the pain that awaited me, so I severed the cord of life.. All I ask for is a proper burial for a soul who just wanted to be touched by love, but instead drown within my own lifeline.. So please write down a kind thought about me; then spit upon its words, because hate is what kills us all..

© 2015 Chris D.


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I very interesting piece that leaves me with so many thoughts and questions.
I enjoyed it. (Spit)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Chris D.

9 Years Ago

Hahaha!! Aka, thanks for the laugh and taking the time..:)
"Don't try and get inside my mind, for I've been trying to escape since the day I was conceived.." - I love this opening sentence it's witty and captivating straight from the start, I'd reconsider your use of commas throughout the piece to let the flow roll freely so to speak.

The message itself, this hate and cause for self destruction and thus the creation of which it draws from and consumes us is beautiful. A great piece thanks for sharing - ATC

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ana D S M

9 Years Ago

You're welcome. lilith.
Ana D S M

9 Years Ago

Ha, this was supposed to go above. Nice to meet you ATC.
Tinotenda Nyevedzanai

9 Years Ago

Ha hello :) and you're welcome Chris.
Ahhhh!! You are so right here.I am a cynic too. And reading your words i wanted to gulp down the wine of distrust which would never warm the hope in me.Kudos indeed to you.I really liked this .You surely took a deep dive into head and brought out the pieces which were buried.I like your style.Psycho-analytical in nature its brain-churning.. *keep writing*

~Sophy

Posted 9 Years Ago


Chris D.

9 Years Ago

Wow, you've touched my day and can't thank you enough for taking the time.. I was going for a physic.. read more

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I love to sip on other peoples thoughts, for it's my favorite kind of buzz because I can take the keys to your mind and drive.. more..

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