First time

 "Come on in." I can’t believe this was happening. I shut the door and before I can utter a word he has me pined against the door. His lips pressed hard against mine. All the lust we've felt for each other coming out in that one kiss of desire.
 "I'm sorry. I couldn't help myself. I've wanted you so badly and seeing you standing there looking at me with your beautiful eyes..." Adian trailed off looking straight into my eyes. His eyes were a deep blue. Taking my hand he opens the door.

 "Where are we going?" I hope he couldn't hear the fear in my voice.

 "You'll see. Come one just trust me." Smiling a loving smile that made me melt a little inside he holds out his hand and takes me to the car. Opening the door I climb in nervously. As soon as the door shut he runs around and gets in and takes off in a matter of seconds.

 I couldn't help myself I have to tell him. Though it be embarrassing to tell him I'm a v-card holder when he might not be looking to f**k me.
 "Here we are." Turning off the ignition he doesn't move he just stares at the wheel. "You don't have to do anything you don't want to." I look out and see he brought me to a hotel. The Carez. It was the most luxury hotel in the town. I look at him flushed with feelings I thought I would never have the chance to feel. Love.

 "I have to tell you something before we even try anything." He looks at me hard.

 "Yes?"

 "I've never...well...I'm a virgin." I see his eyes soften and he unbuckles and scoots over to me taking my face into his hands gently he reaches down and kisses me. I let out a sigh of relief as he jumps out and runs around and opens my door. Taking my hand he leads me into the hotel.

Reviews

[Chris]

A good chapter. It's easy to sense the characters' feelings in your words, and the overall tone is nicely established. Aside from a few instances, the words flowed smoothly.

Again, if you want to improve this, consider adding a little more detail. For example, what does the hotel look like? You could also mention what car Adian has--something like this can give insight into a character's personality and financial status.

Also, is it really necessary for this chapter to be separate from the first? They seem like they could go just fine with one another, and neither chapter is too long to where they need a break in between them.

But other than that, it was a good chapter. I enjoyed reading it. :)

[dsweeney]

loved the way you wrote this. please hurry and write the next chapter! My eyes were searching for more words and then im thinking i need to know what happens next. Great job

[Mohamed Hani]

nice...

[Steve Ryman]

Great except for line 7. You can't see fear in a voice. Hear it maybe? Otherwise I loved it yet again.

[Strake]

Wow, well-written. I like it alot!