. . . to my love . . .

I'd walk a million miles

just to see your smile

i could think of all the things to say
to make all your fears go away

I would move the earth

just to hold you here

and all the pain you take
i'd steal it all away just for your sake

 

i would have took the shot right out
to find what it was all about

yeah i would have walked a million miles

just to make you smile

 

and through out all these years

i have fought so much with so many tears

maybe one less word would've stopped you

the feeling so lost right now without you

 

maybe if you could've seen all my tears

maybe then you would've stayed right here

i hope you know that i loved you too

and i just want you to know that i miss you

Reviews

[loverly9316]

this came from experience losing someone you love is hard and even harder when you have nothing to remember them by

[Soul Magic✯]

beautifully expressed from the heart and soul. your ink is so amazing and sweet. i enjoyed reading this piece. stay hot :)

[Delphine]

Some parts were out of rhythm, but I did enjoy this piece. I especially like the second and third stanza. Another thing I like about this poem is the element. It's filled with a sort of longing that leaves me wanting.

Good work, but next time try and work on your structure. Some parts, as I have already said, were out of flow, but if you fixed them then I'm sure you could really have something here.