end of strings

I am at the end nearing the edge

facing fear cornered on a ledge

i don't know how much more i can handle

the only thing to light my way is a dying candle

my days get darker my nights longer

i wish i could say i am getting stronger

but i feel myself slipping more

into what i used to be before

 

slipping farther away into oblivion

letting go of you of us

i am leaving this world moving on

letting go of everyone

 

i'd like to say farewell before i go

changing back into someone i used to know

but i can't say when i'll be gone

just that it wont be too long

i will miss this person very much

and every heart that she touched

no more can i care about the ones i love

i am done searching for the only one

i can not let myself be hurt even more

i will create a wall a cover that can't be tore

 

 

Reviews

[Bare trees]

That last sentence puts a blemish on the poem. You need a comma after the word wall, and 'tore' does not fit. Torn might, but it would deviate from your rhyme scheme. You may need to think more on that. There are other places that could use punctuation but the the poem itself is a good one. It shows the dismay at what life has turned out to be. For that, I wish you lots of luck, but remember, there are many who experience this and find there way back.

[loverly9316]

Thank you. You're actually right, I wrote this so long ago. Don't know how I didn't see it then.