Cloudless Ignorance

The snow is sort of a metaphor for when you have memory loss and all the sudden these, some wanted some unwanted, memories come back.

Today snow broke the sky

 

Clearing my vision

Wishes through my fingers.

 

Within storm clouds of thought

The sky shelters me in darkness

With endearing thought of sun

Sky plays with me

Nurtures me

Pacific’s me.

 

The sky was perfect,

Then snow shattered through

 

Reckless-

Revolutionary-

Irresponsible-

Iridescent

 

White flurries of truth,

The world

Misery-

Wonders.

 

Hail ball memories,

Blood drips down His back,

Cigarette blister scars on my brothers.

 

Sweet snowflake reminiscence,

Whispers of soft violet perfume.  

 

Snow broke through the sky.

 

With rough hands

Snow broke the sky,

With gentle arms

Snow shook me awake.

 

Snow broke through

Shattered humidity

Cleared clouds

 

Snow broke the sky

And I want to go back.

Author's Note

This is something I wrote based off of a poem sketch, not 100% sure it's done but look forward to some different view points. Also haven't done much punctuation yet.

Reviews

[Daniel Valentine Rivera]

So it's snowing where I am right now. After building a snow man, I finally realized that this snow has no greater purpose. Now I don't know how I feel about snow anymore. Like in this poem, even though the snow is beautiful, it still feels like an intrusion.

[Pixidust]

I don't know if what I see in the poem is what you see, but for me, the snow is sort of a metaphor for like when you have memory loss and all the sudden these, some wanted some unwanted, memories come back.

[Daniel Valentine Rivera]

After seeing your interpretation of it and after re-reading the poem again, I can totally see what you mean! I'm sorry I'm not the best at interpreting poems. Still it's a very enjoyable poem. Well done. :)

[Pixidust]

the beauty of poetry is that everyone interprets it differently, thats what makes for great discussions.

[Daniel Valentine Rivera]

I completely agree! But the writer always has an intended meaning and it's interesting to decipher what that is. I also like to respect the authors interpretation.

[Amrita]

It's 100% done as per me. This is so beautiful. The way you created and expressed is amazing.
All the best..
Keep writing :)

[Pixidust]

Thanks bunches hun!