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"Let's pretend I'm not me and you aren't you." She said, smiling hazily. I didn't know what she meant, but I agreed. She's a mystic. A princess with grey eyes and green kool-aid streaked hair.

She'll rule the world someday, I'm just her next stepping stone. And that's okay as I weave flowers at her feet. She tells me secrets everyone already knows, and I am in awe.

She's reminds me of springtime and teenage lust. She's a drug. We're all on drugs. She dances in twirling, whirling waves of brilliance and light. The smell of roses and grace left behind in her wake.

"Let's have an adventure." She says, the early morning misting through the curtains. I follow her lead, inhaling her numbing essence and laughing aloud. Tracing my fingers softly across the rainbows her dreams leave behind.

Author's Note

Unfinished plaything of mine.

Reviews

[MsJewel]

I like this unfinished. It leaves more to the readers imagination.

This poem took me to a place of new love - that first feeling of falling in love, when everything is sunshine and roses. "I weave flowers at her feet" - worshiping the beauty before us.
She reminds me of springtime - another favorite line that just warms my heart.
Truly a beautiful poem and one that I will read again and again.
:) Julie

[love, lorey]

Thank you for such a lovely review!
I think I agree, unfinished it may stay :)
Thanks for reading Julie!

[MsJewel]

My pleasure. Your poetry is a delight to read!

[love, lorey]

I happen to think the same of yours! Thank again! You've made my day.

[Trace]

This is good.
it left me hanging.....wanting more
a prelude to something magical or sensual

What happened next?????????

Trace

[love, lorey]

I've actually thought about expanding on this, but I kind of like having to use your imagination to see what could be next.... thanks Trace! You've given me something to wonder over, and that's my favorite thing. :)

[Trace]

I know where I would take it..... but I tend to lean toward erotica and sensual poetry.

T.

[love, lorey]

Lol well then, I'll leave your imagination to make that call. :)

[Glenn McCrary]

You had me at "Let's pretend I'm not me and you aren't you." The rest history and I couldn't read this piece without smiling. It creates a tender and innocent feeling of amorous warmth within the reader. Thank you for this piece. :)

[love, lorey]

No, thank you!

[Justine]

This is quite captivating in its surrealism. I see from your author's note that it's unfinished but I had to comment on what's in front of me so far. Vivid images delicately laced, and the line "tracing my fingers softly across the rainbows her dreams leave behind" is superb. I wonder if it's an alter ego, an invisible friend or another unknown entity yet to be defined. I admire the creativity of this write. Justine

[love, lorey]

Thank you so much! I greatly appreciate your words.

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for penning...:).............

[love, lorey]

Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..............

[love, lorey]

A powerful dreamy write here, love, lorey. I do love to read writings like this, merged in a great magical fantasy brain like yours is :) I'm glad I came upon this one, thank you for sharing... you have a magical pen.

- Elisa

[love, lorey]

What a lovely review! And such a compliment coming from you. Thank you!

You're more than welcome anytime! :) and thanks to you :)