If

If this emptiness is all that I am…
I ask you to have mercy on my soul.

If this hatred is all that I will become…

I ask you to have mercy on my soul.

            If this sadness is all that will consume me…

I ask you to put me out of my misery.

            If this hunger for more is all that will haunt me…

I ask you to fill me with something new.

            If this loved is something that I will never know…

I ask you to rip it from my vision.

            And if this wasted hope is all that I have…

I ask you to give me something different.

Reviews

[Cool Handless Luke]

I love the format of this and the redacted words you touch upon. I also love how it comes back to the

sentiment that you are essentially saying I don't need the same old crap and I don't want excuses. Give

me something else! Give me something more! Give me something with meaning that I can live for and

that, when it comes my turn to die, I can die knowing that my life had purpose. Beautiful sentiments

Lisa. Well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. I like the honest emotion and logical desires in the poem. Sometime we must tell the truth to protect the mind and the heart. I like the repetition. Gave strength and purpose to the poem. A strong ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Everett DeValle]

DEEP...I'm sure many can relate to what you wrote...I do relate to the pain. A wonderful emotive poem.

[Jeff]

Very awesome!

[kerri]

such a good piece! I love the truthfulness of it. Also, the format works perfectly. love it :)

[Monica-Antoinetta-Magda..]

such a truly deep and honest piece of writing, you didn't try to hide what you were saying--you just say it (and say it beautifully!) I love this. You are very talented

[Kaya]

This is so sincere, so beautiful. I can really connect with the pain in this, the desperation. This is excellently written.

[Sirius King]

i really like this
very sincere write :-)

[Art Sun]

such an emotional release of thoughts...interestingly it has two sides to the emotion within the escape of those expressions of life...