Follow Me

Follow me into the night

I'll take you on a magical flight

Up in the sky all alone

With only the world to roam

Just come with me I'll show you how

to prowl the nightlife, bear with me now

Just follow me into the night

We'll share the joy of our magical flight

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very uplifting, teach one how to let loose and live for the minute... that is the best way to feel alive.

[Wildecat]

Short sweet and well said, thanks for sharing.

[GuerillaPoet]

This poem has a good tone to it. It's light and cheery. The flow is alright.

The rhyme could use some work, though. And you're spelling the word "follow" wrong. Also, ending each sentence with a period just messes up the flow. I would end each one with a comma, or nothing at all. Actually, nothing at all is probably the best way.

Also, your poem's not really saying anything. It's short and it doesn't tell a story, it just has a few lines about taking someone somewhere. It's almost like 1/4th of a Disney song. It definitely has a good tone, though, but I think it needs more work.

Not bad at all, though. Thanks much for the read.

GP

[Mintwhiskers]

i loved that poem a lot good job