Garments

Undo me, my garments are in pain.
Now I must crawl naked to your heart.
Can I not find there a place to lie?
Lovers' kisses linger when they part.
Even so, shall I with you remain.

Life's not flesh, nor does it end with death.
Its force, still radiant, fills each empty place.
Gone the star, the light still strikes the eye;
Gone the flesh, the soul retains its grace.
Your life, your love, your joy--these are my breath.

Reviews

[Pratik]

This poem is soulful! This has one of those unique characteristics where there is a self rhyming in the lines ( though not strictly speaking ).. What I mean is this, there is a kind of music that flows in the lines and the words seem to be singing to each other... May be other people will differ, but this is what I felt the instant I read it.
Coming to the subject matter you have meticulously broached upon the matters of life and love in this piece.. The bones and flesh are truly like garments that we shed upon death; the spirit is eternal and at the heart of this force, lies the power of love - the love that keeps us alive in the hearts of our loved ones, in their memories even after we have embraced death....
I think it's very commendable how you have made an inclusion of these two themes in your poem ( usually one sees poetry that talks about either of the two even though I think they are a part of the same thing) and at the same time kept it compact... This is very beautiful.. Loved your writing and looking forward to read more :)

[Arielle Ann]

this has a spiritual touch to it, even I believe life doesn't end with the decay of the flesh; our thoughts, our love still lingers within the soul, which drifts away, maybe stays I don't know! lovely insight!

[Wolfhilde]

This is really wonderful to read. The words you wrote are beautiful.

"Life's not flesh, nor does it end with death."

Just beautiful... Well done!


Wolfhilde

[victoria]

beautiful, eloquent poetry

[emmajoy]

Reasonable and quite traditional phrasing spoiled by the rather strange use of UNCLE LIGGY as an acrostic attempt!

[Heather]

This was beautiful to read, I loved the last line tremendously. Such a raw and yes incredibly gentle poem.

[Bewitching Sensations]

'now I must crawl naked to your heart' love that line... You are a natural... Well done :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Exquisite writing, some of the best I have read in quite awhile.

[rnuff]

This is wonderful. Love it

[Michael Soul]

breath this life and taste its sweetness al-along felling its bitter draw.
i like when i read someone's work and new words form within me thank you

[JourneyBlu]

Beautiful, full of love and so many lines that can support themselves. What a wonderful picture. I especially love the line "Gone the flesh, the soul retains its grace." It is a powerful statement. Loved it, thanks for sharing!