Interesting. On my first reading I had originally thought--up until the 6th stanza--that you were representing your double life through the two line stanzas as so:
What they see
What I hide
Perhaps consider the style, half your poem reads that way anyway and it'd be a lovely addition. As it stands though it's a really good piece. Touching on a sad, but familiar truth about us all. Great work, keep it up!
Interesting. On my first reading I had originally thought--up until the 6th stanza--that you were representing your double life through the two line stanzas as so:
What they see
What I hide
Perhaps consider the style, half your poem reads that way anyway and it'd be a lovely addition. As it stands though it's a really good piece. Touching on a sad, but familiar truth about us all. Great work, keep it up!
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