cinderella

My parents fought, every Second every hour,
That's not how it is meant to be,
My mind corrupted, heart ripped in half
Is this what love is supposed to be?
If it is, I don't want it, no not at all
This f*****g fairy tale is such a drool
There's no Prince Charming to sweep me of my feet
It's just Cinderella, who no ones dying to meet
I lack behind in school, I'm not always happy
I can't be singing songs, when I feel so very crappy
My background is bad, I'm not invited to no ball
If I meet a Prince Charming he'd be such a tool
My mind corrupted, heart ripped in half
Is this what love is supposed to be?
If it is, I don't want it, no not at all
This f*****g fairy tale is such a drool
Made to work ,don't have no mice friends
If I'm trapped in a room, it's where it bloody ends
I don't wear glass slippers,if I do they would break
If Prince Charming saw me, he'd run back to lock the gates
This ain't a f*****g fairytale, stop being a Naive b***h
Open up your eyes before you fall down the bloody ditch
My mind corrupted, heart ripped in half
Is this what love is supposed to be?
If it is, I don't want it, no not at all
This f*****g fairy tale is such a drool

Author's Note

hey!, thanks for reading, and send in any requests for poems x
and please feel free to tell me how i can improve!
thank you xxxx

Reviews

[J.A. Marquez]

At your own request here are some suggestions: Word choice is very important in something like this. Some of the words you used took away from the deeper meaning i.e. crappy, drool, tool. Don't try to rhyme for the sake of rhyming. Feel the words before you write them down. This is a rough start, BUT it is a start and I believe you can make it a very readable, powerful poem. Just work on it, ruminate on it if you will. The words will come. Remember, you are trying to convey a specific feeling, focus on that and don't worry about the other stuff so much.