Undefined Elegance

This is my first attempt at writing a poem to share with everyone (: any criticism, advice, praise or whatever you feel like sharing with me is welcome (:

She's always on my mind,

 With her charming eyes and elusive smile,

  These words I cannot find,

   To sum up her expressionless beauty,

    She remains undefined.

I feel peace of mind,

 When her soft whisper glides to me,

  Her warm embrace is so tight yet unconfined,

   I'm lost in her playful eyes,

    She remains undefined.

Reviews

[Sukriti Suki]

Wonderful! I like how it flows and the imagery.

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

this is rather good :)
I love how the repetition gives so much feel to the poem and you show imagery well in your words :)

[J.T. Decker]

If this is your first attempt at writing a poem, you're off to a great start. Good stuff.

[Miss Fox]

How sweet :)
"I feel peace of mind,
When her soft whisper glides to me"
These lines were even more striking to me than the others. Your work is wonderfully touching