girls in the bar...

For Kerry's THursday Challenge #1: inspiration from "Catcher in the Rye" by J.D. Salinger.

“That's the thing about girls. Every time they do something pretty, even if they're not much to look at, or even if they're sort of stupid, you fall half in love with them, and then you never know where the hell you are. Girls. Jesus Christ. They can drive you crazy. They really can.”
The Catcher in the Rye

 

Of course she was a crummy girl

Do you have a light?

Of course I was a gentleman and lit her cigarette

Buy a girl a drink?

I never liked blatant beggars, for the life of me

So what do you do for a living?

Already, she is sizing me up according to the thickness of my wallet

I just love a man with a thick head of hair…

Shallow intent gets a woman nowhere in my book

Oopsie, guess I’ve had a bit too much to drink! (giggles)

DANGER! DANGER, WILL ROBINSON! DANGER!

Maybe we could go back to your place so I can freshen up?

Maybe we could buy you a t-shirt that says ‘town bike’?

I must apologize, for I’m not like this normally, I seem to have let the night get to me.

Or perhaps you’re a phony, like every other woman with a gin streak in her and a lonely heart?

I’ve always depended on the kindness of strangers…

Do you think you’re Blanche DuBois from “streetcar”? she was a nutjob too.

My what a fabulous apartment you have!

Care for a drink, baby?

Author's Note

Kerry's Thursday Challenge #1. i'm a chump for a demanding south african girl!

Reviews

[Allen Smuckler]

This is just so flol....and so true...boy, I smiled and laughed my way through this escapade...and was so happy to see such a happy ending...for the evening that is...
You have such a unique, candid, flippant way of telling a story...refreshing, carefree and matter-of-factly....Oh, BTW, great write, Bradley
allen

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Hmmm, let me see...who is the easy one here?
Great dialogue, and oh so frickin' true.
This made me cringe, er, smile.
Excellent writing.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This is a fave of mine! Excellent job! Loved the style in which you chosed to write!

[KAREN]

Love the story in this poem! Nice humor and fun to read.

[Kerry O'Connor]

What an apt quote for you, Bradley, I never saw it coming...at all!

How cleverly you wrought the story-line through the conversation, and asides...and so much more has been said between the lines!

So what do you do for a living?

Already, she is sizing me up according to the thickness of my wallet

I just love a man with a thick head of hair… That's priceless!!

Thank you for entering your piece in the Thursday Challenge #1

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Real and to the point, made me smile you did, excellent Bradley.

[Robin]

now appearing at a nightclub near you ...

I bet she could dance ..

a classic Bradley

[Ruth]

Hon, very cool, amusing and a fav! lol xx

[emmajoy]

A naughty literary streak in you, mister, and nothing to do with the challenge - you understand far too well and I'm laughing as the scene unfolds - especially at the end!

[J]

uh huh ~ you'll be trash talkin all the way to the altar.

ahhhhhhhhh! oh. and ya 'got me' on that one! nice job!