the sequel...

an vision of otherworldly events...

another world

another time

another place

having kept our memories

through our transcendental shift

we would find one another

and give each other

what the other needs

I wouldn’t be so jaded a man

So wrecked a soul

Perhaps my smile would be wider

And more permanent

And maybe I’d have more kids

So I’ll check my watch

Set my clock

And count down the minutes

To the next life

The new show

Where everything is clean

And the people applause…

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

I would be lying if I said I never had this same thought. I find myself always wondering what life would be like if i did this or that, or if I didn't do this. or that. I also find myself wondering what i would do with myself in the next life, if i will have a chance to find the people i know now, or maybe it is a sequel, a life after this one influenced the world....guess I need to start influencing.

Great read, and write. I applaud this life.

Matthew

[Michael of Gilead]

I liked what you tried to do here....

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well..in you next life..try for that life :)

[David W Moore III]

I think we'd all like a rewrite of some portion or other!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Philanderer and statical without being brash, a clear and riveting wording scheme with polite imagery, a good read well done

[Ashesh]

such recurring thoughts have been haunting me since long time. But now i have resolved that i'm gonna stick to this life and try to make it better. No one is bigger than your life that you had to justify it with death.
Whereas, its easier said than done. One cannot just defy such emotions.
Feeling of vulnerability is so vivid in your poem. An awesome write.

[emmajoy]

Brilliantly muted thoughts .. and yet with that new life, that new show, you'll be another you and then, one day, you'll write these words again, and again .. ad infinitum. Your gentleness drifts over these words, the serious Bradley, the thinking what if, why and where, man .. and you take us, your readers, with you; we stay or go, sharing or remembering - but whichever, wondering.

'.. through our transcendental shift ~ we would find one another ~ and give each other ~ what the other needs.. '

[Sel Whiteley]

Love the format to this since it truly reflects a broken life, and the short lines seem to reflect the countdown. I also adore the richness of the diction "our transcendental shift" and yet how it fits with the more mundane

so jaded a man

So wrecked a sou

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokhar..]

Outstandingly Awesome write...Very optimistic thoughts :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the composed compusere is at perfect pitch even as it relays the seedlings of regrets ~

[My Fair Lady]

Viewing life through your eyes is always so enlightening. I love that you used the right justification on this piece.. How fitting.