a break in the clouds...

something light and sugar free

Bright eyes

Sunshine smile

Burn this tear

On my cheek

That has fallen

Too many times to count

Dust me off

Clean me up

You make the heart beat faster

My dark cloud

Dissipates

Loses cohesion

The bricks around my heart

Crumble

But only a little

Because I keep one foot

In the grave

So I won’t fall far

Should you drop me…

Author's Note

who's to say what makes me who i am?

Reviews

[No use.]

my latest poem i haven't posted yet, is not like this, but ends with a similar rhythm, telling me we would be horrible dance partners :P

with that said, you wanna know my reason for keeping one foot in the grave...so i won't kill you should you move me! :O

[Quinn Blackburn]

Lovely wordcrafting... tender and healing in cautiously unfolding petals. :o) You my friend are like an M&M. Hard crunchy colorful exterior, dark but sweet on the inside :o) And a stellar wordsmith to boot!

[My Fair Lady]

Revealing of the fragility that exists when one has been hurt, but keeps trying. What I love about you Bradly is your works generally reveal little pieces of your soul, your very existence which usually has a tough outer shell.. a protection from what has haunted your past. It is a wonderful reminder of your tenderness when you surprise us with the humanly gentle side of you. I love all of your complexities.

[emmajoy]

Both joy and sadness in this post, Bradley L plus a fine balance of words with discreet meter but then, that's you, your writing. Not sure about the ending, makes me want to say have trust, love,. but, you know you .. you seem to be aware of something possible but .. ..

Your writing usually show a little or more daring, here there's an insight into thoughts outside yourself .. sometimes 'we' don't know ourselves.

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokhar..]

Distilled thoughts :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

those last three lines quake the heart~and tumble the soul

[HopelesslyDevoted]

love the ending :) amazing!

[Robin]

this is why your writing is special Bradley , you know who you are , and you put it out there .

[Jennie Chains]

Cautiously optimistic view of falling, just to hope you don't break.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

This is excellent Bradley and only you can make that decision.