a break in the clouds...

something light and sugar free

Bright eyes

Sunshine smile

Burn this tear

On my cheek

That has fallen

Too many times to count

Dust me off

Clean me up

You make the heart beat faster

My dark cloud

Dissipates

Loses cohesion

The bricks around my heart

Crumble

But only a little

Because I keep one foot

In the grave

So I won’t fall far

Should you drop me…

Author's Note

who's to say what makes me who i am?

Reviews

[No use.]

my latest poem i haven't posted yet, is not like this, but ends with a similar rhythm, telling me we would be horrible dance partners :P

with that said, you wanna know my reason for keeping one foot in the grave...so i won't kill you should you move me! :O

[Matthew Kult]

Who is to say what makes any of us who we are? You should never cast judgement until you know the sum of all the parts. It's just good business. As for the poem itself, I like the message. I love the emotional release. always a fan of this structure, its like a quick cross to the face that doesn't off the lights but you know you just got clocked.

Matthew

[Joiedevivre]

perfect ending, i make good sense of this!

[Michael of Gilead]

Waiting for the other shoe to drop.....

[KAREN]

Beautiful write, so different from your other poems, a softer side of you! Good job!!

[*~DreamDeamon~*]

very different kind of poem, i was not expecting the ending. good poem. :)

[Janice Ann]

Hummm...! The last few sentences really got to me. And I believe sometimes that is just how we see it! We do not want to believe someone will not fail us so we wait for them to do so! Thanks for sharing!

[Kerry O'Connor]

Sometimes the only belief we may retain is that the one ray of sunshine will stay around long enough for you to warm your face.

[OT]

ooo a different tone for you - but no less brilliant - that touch of trepidation at the end - I love those final four lines - "Because I keep one foot

In the grave

So I won’t fall far

Should you drop me…"

[Michael Morris]

those last few lines were sad as s**t man, reminds me of some joy division or the smiths, just don't kill or cut yourself man

[.]

The bricks around my heart
Crumble
But only a little
Because I keep one foot
In the grave
So I won’t fall far
Should you drop me…

You need to let go...