lost paradise....

lost paradise....

A Poem by Brad
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somewhere...there is a land of respite

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where’s my beach

that blanket of sand

warm upon my legs

that ocean crash

ebb and flow

massaging the restless

heart and soul

of a blinded shadow

of a man

bullied into silence

where’s the palm trees

and the endless sun

to break the monotonous

darkness that creeps

upon my every turn

that salt water air

to relieve my senses

take me home

take me home

don’t let me die

in this strange hell

where no one knows me

and no one claims me…

© 2010 Brad


Author's Note

Brad
i claim the ocean as my home, because when i'm near her...i feel complete...

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I liked how this flowed...like waves

I think this is one of your best works yet Brad

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Me too..there is something about the ocean..that calms me..maybe I was a mermaid in a former life :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


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You do belong there, not just because of heredity, but it is soothing, calming and can turn a black mood into white. I hope you find your way back soon~

Never quite found my home yet, but I know it sure as h*** ain't the Midwest...



Posted 14 Years Ago


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"of a blinded shadow
of a man
bullied into silence"

this really struck me... great write overall. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


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real chill, matter of fact, sort of thing, i like it a lot and in all seriousness, if im ever in Minnesota i want to have a beer and a conversation with you, your stuffs real f****n cool and i can relate to just about all of it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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very artistic and realistic description used in this poem:)

Posted 14 Years Ago


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This is good stuff. I feel the same way about the sea. Grew up on the shores of South Florida. I miss the Atlantic everyday...and especially at night. great writing.
cheers!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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such dual emotions. every other line descending into dark, every other line almost reaching home ... just beautiful. i love the ocean , i'm not sure where my home is lol

Posted 14 Years Ago


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for you the ocean~ for me the desert~ we all have the pull of origins in our heart~
exceptional poetic flow~

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"Don't let me die in this strange hell!" I enjoyed this line. Makes one think a bit. Well stated write.

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