"matured by time, poisioned by reality" Great line. I read this and it really got me thinking. Not just about what I dream to be, but just about life in general. Whatever you hoped to accomplish with this poem, well, you accomplished it. This is really good. "Epic" even... God I hate that word.
I notice the philosophical side of you is surfacing more * more, I like that. The premise of your poem is a ride back into time. I often wonder what it is to have a dream, for me I already knew what my reality would be.
"matured by time, poisioned by reality" Great line. I read this and it really got me thinking. Not just about what I dream to be, but just about life in general. Whatever you hoped to accomplish with this poem, well, you accomplished it. This is really good. "Epic" even... God I hate that word.
really something kept thinking for...leaving the readers a question on their mind, and the good point of this poem is lesson that is inspiring but this poem needs more emotions so that people will be much inspired...anyways, this was great poem:)
Such innocence here, perfectly voiced, an honest heart that wants the best for their children but theres also an important factor here of reality being the poison and dreams having the freedom, thats so cool lol So true too, in dreams we can do anything, be anything, if we hold onto that, we can create our own happiness, maybe, on some level of reality? Great poem sweety xx