Make a Mess.

Mess me up
Break me down
This is the point of no return
Can't keep swimming
My lungs are filling
Now I'm drowning in your hate

Crimson rain falling to the floor
My eyes turn a lighter shade
The vision is blurry
Your words are slurring
Quick quick let's all go see
If you can win this screaming war.

Reviews

[Alisia]

Really love your poem. Great, expressing words

[Mark]

quick quick

[Mitch*Dandy]

cool! this is well expressed. I loooove it!

[deeps]

I like this, I think emotions are well expressed!

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

wow...what has happend.....be careful with "hate"

[freaknkamikaze]

This is a beautiful poem ^.^