What if i told you....

What if i told you....

A Poem by Valkyrie Warrior
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A poem

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What if I told you my skin was scarred, fault lines etched into my wrists and my arms.

 What if I told you that I was dark, black is my soul and dead is my heart.

  What if I told you I really had tried, but all of my light had dimmed and died.

   What if I said I loved you to death, but then I said no, would you listen?

     What if when I stood on the edge there was no one to stop my fall.

       I am sorry my dear for all I have said, but this is the end, of it all.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Jun 11, 2015


 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2015 Valkyrie Warrior


Author's Note

Valkyrie Warrior
Dark but............

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You should've made this for mature audiences. It's melancholic however I feel these words . Even MORE personal, at a point in time & even still now I feel .. "similar " feelings that add up to a pessimistic mind set, no matter how much optimistim I encourage In myself. I really hope things get better for you over time . we all need change .

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dion [MFMDM]

9 Years Ago

Mmmm just more of like hieroglyphics. They look and say they understand but sometimes I'm sure they .. read more
Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Well thanks for the unique :P review Dion, I appreciate your take on my writing :)
Dion [MFMDM]

9 Years Ago

Lol mmmhmm



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Wow very dark, but very suspenseful to me, I really love your writing and tone for this poem. Beautiful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Awww thank you!!!!
Dark but.....awesome, powerful and a great piece. A few people have already said this but it really stick with you. I too read it a couple of time! You have taken something that is hard,dark sad and made it beautiful! well done!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

I am so touched, thank you very much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
sereenaoutloud

9 Years Ago

you are more than welcome, i really enjoyed reading it!!
Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

:-D.............................
Dark but............. Beautiful. Wow! It has this dark aura around it... like it is just too broken to be fixed. But even so, its story is just as much enticing as any other. Nice job! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Thank you so very much!
Moonlight

9 Years Ago

You are welcome! :)
Wow..this is one of those rare pieces that stays with you after you finish. I had to go back and read it three more times. This piece was truly haunting..Looking forward to more of your writing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Wow I am touched!!! Thank you for the lovely review!
Dark as the night and brilliant as the full moon.
Keep sharing your brokenness that blends so well with the darkness, dear poet.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Wow you are to kind!!
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alf
Hi Beautifully broken. Dark, yes . . . emotional . . . yes . . . a great write YES!!! Wow! You have pack so much heart-wrenching, gut-clenching drama into those few lines, that the reader gets to the last word and suddenly realizes he/she must breathe!!! A wonderful piece of spine-chilling poetry. Loved it, alf

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Dear alf that is one of the sweetest things anyone has ever said to me!! Thank you so very much dear.. read more
alf

9 Years Ago

Never say a word I don't mean, believe me, alf
Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Wow thank you!
*speechless* .
This piece was great, the emotions run so deep in these lines.
Gave me goosebumps.
Wonderful write.
Very well done.

Thank you.
Angad

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Wow thank you so much! You are far to kind!!!!!
Angad Waraich

9 Years Ago

You're most welcome keep writing!!
Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

:-)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"What if I said I loved you to death, but then I said no, would you listen?
What if when I stood on the edge there was no one to stop my fall."

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

:)...........................
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

:).....................
Wow. So wonderful to visit and enjoy these kinds of amazing writes...Bravo.....

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Sami!!!!!!!!
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)......
Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

:).....................

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Added on March 30, 2015
Last Updated on July 7, 2015
Tags: love, scars, hidden, trust, fear, dark, suicide

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