You should've made this for mature audiences. It's melancholic however I feel these words . Even MORE personal, at a point in time & even still now I feel .. "similar " feelings that add up to a pessimistic mind set, no matter how much optimistim I encourage In myself. I really hope things get better for you over time . we all need change .
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Mature!? I can't say I can see anything mature about it, can you highlight the things that make it m.. read moreMature!? I can't say I can see anything mature about it, can you highlight the things that make it mature? But anyway, thank you for the review!
9 Years Ago
Hmmm .. ok say for example an average 15 year old reads this. I don't believe they would get the ful.. read moreHmmm .. ok say for example an average 15 year old reads this. I don't believe they would get the full concept & comprehension. However a more mature, experienced reader that may be familiar with words that are meant to be esoteric. that's jut how I read lol . I always feel like there's a deeper meaning than what's on the surface.
9 Years Ago
So you don't think it is bad for people younger but just, kind of, wasted?
Mmmm just more of like hieroglyphics. They look and say they understand but sometimes I'm sure they .. read moreMmmm just more of like hieroglyphics. They look and say they understand but sometimes I'm sure they don't.
9 Years Ago
Well thanks for the unique :P review Dion, I appreciate your take on my writing :)
Dark but.....awesome, powerful and a great piece. A few people have already said this but it really stick with you. I too read it a couple of time! You have taken something that is hard,dark sad and made it beautiful! well done!!
Dark but............. Beautiful. Wow! It has this dark aura around it... like it is just too broken to be fixed. But even so, its story is just as much enticing as any other. Nice job! :)
Wow..this is one of those rare pieces that stays with you after you finish. I had to go back and read it three more times. This piece was truly haunting..Looking forward to more of your writing!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Wow I am touched!!! Thank you for the lovely review!
Hi Beautifully broken. Dark, yes . . . emotional . . . yes . . . a great write YES!!! Wow! You have pack so much heart-wrenching, gut-clenching drama into those few lines, that the reader gets to the last word and suddenly realizes he/she must breathe!!! A wonderful piece of spine-chilling poetry. Loved it, alf
Dear alf that is one of the sweetest things anyone has ever said to me!! Thank you so very much dear.. read moreDear alf that is one of the sweetest things anyone has ever said to me!! Thank you so very much dear friend!
Hello again
I have decided to return to this community for real this time.
Sorry to all those who sent me read requests, I am getting on to those as you read this :)
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