What if i told you....

What if i told you....

A Poem by Valkyrie Warrior
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A poem

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What if I told you my skin was scarred, fault lines etched into my wrists and my arms.

 What if I told you that I was dark, black is my soul and dead is my heart.

  What if I told you I really had tried, but all of my light had dimmed and died.

   What if I said I loved you to death, but then I said no, would you listen?

     What if when I stood on the edge there was no one to stop my fall.

       I am sorry my dear for all I have said, but this is the end, of it all.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Jun 11, 2015


 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2015 Valkyrie Warrior


Author's Note

Valkyrie Warrior
Dark but............

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You should've made this for mature audiences. It's melancholic however I feel these words . Even MORE personal, at a point in time & even still now I feel .. "similar " feelings that add up to a pessimistic mind set, no matter how much optimistim I encourage In myself. I really hope things get better for you over time . we all need change .

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dion [MFMDM]

9 Years Ago

Mmmm just more of like hieroglyphics. They look and say they understand but sometimes I'm sure they .. read more
Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Well thanks for the unique :P review Dion, I appreciate your take on my writing :)
Dion [MFMDM]

9 Years Ago

Lol mmmhmm



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Yes it was dark and deep but all meaning. Wonderful

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Thank you!!!!
You should've made this for mature audiences. It's melancholic however I feel these words . Even MORE personal, at a point in time & even still now I feel .. "similar " feelings that add up to a pessimistic mind set, no matter how much optimistim I encourage In myself. I really hope things get better for you over time . we all need change .

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dion [MFMDM]

9 Years Ago

Mmmm just more of like hieroglyphics. They look and say they understand but sometimes I'm sure they .. read more
Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Well thanks for the unique :P review Dion, I appreciate your take on my writing :)
Dion [MFMDM]

9 Years Ago

Lol mmmhmm
you need an extra R in Scarred and an extra M in dimmed...but all in all....so true of some relationships

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Oh whoops! Thank you for the review and help Dr Wood!
im thinking that this is meant to be like a diary entry

it's really good

the dark tone works for it i think
and the format is cool too



-Dream

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Dream!
Dark...as dark and depressing, it sounds like you really miss this person. And you really want this special person back or to forgive you for whatever you did. I am sure if you try your best or wait, they may come to realize it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the meaningful review Unknown.
GoGo Tamago

9 Years Ago

Your welcome! My friends say I give good advice, even when I write poems. I haven't been writing poe.. read more
This is very well done and I can feel the pain of the narrator. Trying, losing, failing... all hope is lost. Don't you give up hope though, this is a beautifully dark poem. Keep dreaming ^^

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Wow thank you so very much!!!!!!
Woven into your words is such a beautiful aching.. a desire to be loved for who you are... shadows and light... Oh, how many love us like that? It is a rare thing.. and to find it.. well.. that is the most beautiful love at all. It can keep us from falling off the edge...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Wow thank you for the meaningful review!
Beautiful and powerful. Very heartfelt. I love it

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Wow than you so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is a amazing and beautiful poem...i love it

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Oooh thank you!!!
nice poem.. Very concise and deep..
Go ahead and all the best..

Posted 9 Years Ago


Valkyrie Warrior

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much for the review Kousika!!
Kousika

9 Years Ago

:)) keep going.. i love all your writing..

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Added on March 30, 2015
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Tags: love, scars, hidden, trust, fear, dark, suicide

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