You should've made this for mature audiences. It's melancholic however I feel these words . Even MORE personal, at a point in time & even still now I feel .. "similar " feelings that add up to a pessimistic mind set, no matter how much optimistim I encourage In myself. I really hope things get better for you over time . we all need change .
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Mature!? I can't say I can see anything mature about it, can you highlight the things that make it m.. read moreMature!? I can't say I can see anything mature about it, can you highlight the things that make it mature? But anyway, thank you for the review!
9 Years Ago
Hmmm .. ok say for example an average 15 year old reads this. I don't believe they would get the ful.. read moreHmmm .. ok say for example an average 15 year old reads this. I don't believe they would get the full concept & comprehension. However a more mature, experienced reader that may be familiar with words that are meant to be esoteric. that's jut how I read lol . I always feel like there's a deeper meaning than what's on the surface.
9 Years Ago
So you don't think it is bad for people younger but just, kind of, wasted?
Mmmm just more of like hieroglyphics. They look and say they understand but sometimes I'm sure they .. read moreMmmm just more of like hieroglyphics. They look and say they understand but sometimes I'm sure they don't.
9 Years Ago
Well thanks for the unique :P review Dion, I appreciate your take on my writing :)
You should've made this for mature audiences. It's melancholic however I feel these words . Even MORE personal, at a point in time & even still now I feel .. "similar " feelings that add up to a pessimistic mind set, no matter how much optimistim I encourage In myself. I really hope things get better for you over time . we all need change .
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Mature!? I can't say I can see anything mature about it, can you highlight the things that make it m.. read moreMature!? I can't say I can see anything mature about it, can you highlight the things that make it mature? But anyway, thank you for the review!
9 Years Ago
Hmmm .. ok say for example an average 15 year old reads this. I don't believe they would get the ful.. read moreHmmm .. ok say for example an average 15 year old reads this. I don't believe they would get the full concept & comprehension. However a more mature, experienced reader that may be familiar with words that are meant to be esoteric. that's jut how I read lol . I always feel like there's a deeper meaning than what's on the surface.
9 Years Ago
So you don't think it is bad for people younger but just, kind of, wasted?
Mmmm just more of like hieroglyphics. They look and say they understand but sometimes I'm sure they .. read moreMmmm just more of like hieroglyphics. They look and say they understand but sometimes I'm sure they don't.
9 Years Ago
Well thanks for the unique :P review Dion, I appreciate your take on my writing :)
Dark...as dark and depressing, it sounds like you really miss this person. And you really want this special person back or to forgive you for whatever you did. I am sure if you try your best or wait, they may come to realize it.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you for the meaningful review Unknown.
9 Years Ago
Your welcome! My friends say I give good advice, even when I write poems. I haven't been writing poe.. read moreYour welcome! My friends say I give good advice, even when I write poems. I haven't been writing poems. It's been a while.
This is very well done and I can feel the pain of the narrator. Trying, losing, failing... all hope is lost. Don't you give up hope though, this is a beautifully dark poem. Keep dreaming ^^
Woven into your words is such a beautiful aching.. a desire to be loved for who you are... shadows and light... Oh, how many love us like that? It is a rare thing.. and to find it.. well.. that is the most beautiful love at all. It can keep us from falling off the edge...
Hello again
I have decided to return to this community for real this time.
Sorry to all those who sent me read requests, I am getting on to those as you read this :)
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