Innocence lost

Never found again.....

Innocence lost is never found

 

You don't know it's gone

 

Till it's shattered on the ground

 

Innocence gone

 

The bad world to replace it

 

Like skeletons in your closet

 

Or bodies in your basement

 

Innocence gone

 

Shreds of paper in the breeze

 

Chains and shackles

 

Never freed.   

 

 

 

 

 

 

Fifth

Apr 6, 2015

 

• Show me what you've got!
• Innocence lost

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

It's gone now....

Reviews

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Really well written. Feeling guilty for some reason? maybe i got the wrong idea... Anyways, you did great with comparing the los of innocence with other bad stuff. I like it.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you very much!!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome.

[Christian N. C.]

Love the detail and emotion. I can tell you put thought and passion into this! Love it :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Wow thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Christian N. C.]

Youre welcome! :)

[Roshan Nair]

Your piece is a painful yet true picture of the virtue that is innocence, so very fickle and brittle.
Lovely writing :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you very much!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Once it's gone it is gone but it's a nature of life ,,,but the way where it goes that path must be bright ..A beautiful poetry woth honest meaning ! : )

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you so much!

[Bare Trees]

It disappears for all of us. It's a part of life, nothing to be ashamed of. (Depending on the situations of course).

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Mmm I guess your right. Thank you for reviewing.

[MomzillaNC]

Well penned… once gone, it may be reclaimed, but never regained.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you for reviewing so much of you work

[MomzillaNC]

yw :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:)!!!!!!!!!

[Arsh]

"Innocence lost is never found... " great start with the line.

One of my fav. writes! Yes, once the innocency's gone.. it's all gone. Nothing left behind the fake-walls of pleasure instead of either being loved or hurt. Strong words/you write depth of the heart!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you very much for the powerful review!

[Thyme13]

While the poem fixates a little without expounding on the idea of loss of innocence, when it's something original it's quite striking. "Bodies in the basement" and "shreds of paper in the breeze" are both nice lines, but the rest of the poem could use some work create more original images and metaphors. More specificity could help strengthen the poem as well.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

I guess that means you like it? I never write more on poems as I am not poet so sorry.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Innocence can be the hardest thing to hold onto especially in a world that is always trying to take it from you. Some incidences there is no control, and you are forced to see what evil is out there... But hold on to every ounce you have... Don't rush life, see the world with awe and imagination, be the dreamer as long as you can. I love this piece, my sweet friend. And I have to say I chuckled when I read with the bodies in the basement line... Lol...see don't be like me with a dark twisted sense of humor...haha. Xoxo

[Valkyrie Warrior]

That was my exact idea behind it! Thank you so much for the review!
P.S Too late I already have a dark sense of humour.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Haha uh oh... Guess we will get along then too well! ;p

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Yes I guess we will

[MsJewel]

Innocence is something so precious, often wished away - until it is gone. I believe it can be found again - in the bloom of a flower, the spark of the stars, the eyes of a child...
Your poem is heartfelt and very well written.

:) Julie

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you very much for taking the time to review, I am very glad you saw the feeling behind this piece.