Excuse me Mr President

Just some flaws

Excuse my Mr President, I don't mean to pry

 

But how can you just sit, while normal people die

 

Did you daddy hurt you?

 

Were you forced and lost your virtue?

 

Or do you just not care?

 

Are you deaf to hear?

 

The cries of Mothers dying

 

An the voice of Fathers lying

 

The sound of children crying

 

Is this your lullaby?

 

So excuse me Mr President

 

I do not mean to pry

 

But look at all this mess

 

Does it make you cry?

 

 

 

 

 

4th place

Feb 4, 2015

 

• Poetry!!
• Excuse me Mr President

 

 

 

 

 

3

Jan 6, 2015

 

• 877$%**&c ,, P0emZA;;;; 8*&*
• Excuse me Mr President  

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

for a contest :)

Reviews

[Tomoe Tellez]

I liked this! Don't stop writing more poems like this one. Even if we can't change things it's good to let our thoughts out.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you very much, you made my day :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Well, this one would get first place in my contest for sure. But i believe, i also have the answer to the questions... Lets look at the system... President's hands are tied...if parliament wont agree on a suggestion, the president can't do anythin. In our system, (Hungary) two third of all in the parliament must vote the 'yes' in order for a suggestion of a new law to be brought into the system, same applies for changing existing laws/rights. Well...that is it in a nutshell. Nice poem. 100 points.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Nicely said! Thank you!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome :) always.

[Confuser]

Wow, great writing, and your call to help for humanity in wonderful as well. It is so hard to believe your age, you are going to be a force to be reckoned with. Keep writing. The world needs to hear your words. Great job. Thank you.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Wow thank you so much!

[Confuser]

You are welcome!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:)!!!!!!!!!!!

[Confuser]

............................Dale

[Valkyrie Warrior]

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[Don't just B, but B ama..]

Very Powerful piece, I am a true believer sadly that most destruction to our planet and human lives are due to CIA, FBI, Military experiments and government cover ups. The worst part is they are not researching cures, or World Peace, or humanitarian efforts, as much as the secret scientific experiments for the next super weapons, or place to save THEIR asses if a world disaster occurs. Places we won't be welcome, or profits we will never befit from. Some things just need to be left alone, everyone of brilliance wants to be the next Einstein, which is wonderful. Unless it involves things that will further destroy our lives and planet, opposed to preserving what we already have.
Wonderful and Powerful piece with a wonderful question.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you so much for reviewing

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yup...if every government would spend as much effort on tryin to fix the problems they created, instead of makin even more problems...well, the world would look differently.

[W R Stowe]

Bet you won this is awesomely written and perhaps could even be true maybe some day I will write a story

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you very much.

[W R Stowe]

your welcome

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:).....................

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Very Nice flow! It's cool though!
What was it for?

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you! It was for a contest.

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Awesome! :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:)!!!!!!!!!!!!

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

This had a nice flow to it. I like how it sounds more prosaic than poetic.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you very much. Umm I am not quite sure what "prosaic" means? can you explain?

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

More prose-like, not a figurative language overload in the sense of how I used it

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Oh cool, thanks.

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

This had a nice flow to it. I like how it sounds more prosaic than poetic.

[DoormanDan]

This put together real nicely. Your use of perfect and imperfect rhyming makes it even more appealing! I'm sure this will do spectacularly in a contest! :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you very much for your kind review :)

[kassystiletto-mermalien]

omfg I love this !!!!! i actually hummed to it cx

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you so much!!!