Fingernails

Oh what evil they can inflict

Fingernails caked in blood

 

As your red life forces

 

Mingles with the mud

 

In my eyes I see your face

 

Even if the earth is your final resting place

 

Fingernails chipped and worn

 

You from my life they have torn.

Author's Note

Whatever just happened I am truly sorry for.

Reviews

[W R Stowe]

appears to of been a bad break up you left the "r" off this line"In my eyes I see you face" have a Happy New Year

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Mmm......Thank you!

[W R Stowe]

your welcome

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:D.............

[ANTO]

This is a classic dark poem - very intense and primordial
could i just make one suggestion - perhaps using 'torn' instead of sawn - not only for the successful rhyming but because the fingernails are more likely to rip/tear/scratch whereas tools like hunting knives and of course saws do the sawing - just a thought - its your work lorharris
:)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you! That's a good idea I think I will change it :)

[ANTO]

Your very welcome

[ANTO]

** you're very welcome lol

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:)................

[Confuser]

I think it is beautiful. You are really talented! My son just turned 14. Gotta show him too. Tag Poetry 101

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you so much

[Confuser]

Y/W................Great job!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:D.........................................Thanks

[Confuser]

Wow, merry go round.......rerouted here. Bye.

[Confuser]

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[Valkyrie Warrior]

Byeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

[Laura3841]

I love this so much...so dark and intriguing! :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you so much for reviewing :)

[Laura3841]

You're welcome :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:D!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Tasfia Islam]

its different and unique... :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Well I hope you like different :) Thank you.

[Tasfia Islam]

No, i must thank you to give me a chance to read such wonderful writings.... :) Thanks for sharing... :)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Wow.................just wow :)

[Tasfia Islam]

:)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:)!!!!!!!!!

[Arsh]

Oh.. liked it! I love the line "Fingernails caked in blood". It`s seemed, you`ve killed someone. Oh My God, You`re a beautiful killer. Damn! I must safe myself from your heart! Haha (Kidding)

Keep writing.
Ps. Your rhyme`s very cool! ;)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Thank you so much :)!!!!!

[Arsh]

"so much?" Umm.. mind if may I ask, "How Much?" Haha (kidding)
Never-mind, "your welcome dear" ;)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

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[Arsh]

Haha.. your beautiful "thissssssssss" is seemed like your breathtaking "kissssssssssssssssss" (kidding) ;)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:) you are sweet!

[Arsh]

Sweet? Well, actually my heart always loves being sweet so, may I dare to ask, how much sweet? Haha (kidding) ;)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

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[Arsh]

Opps! Now it`s seemed, you`ve kissed up my heart. Sounds awesome! Haha ;)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Well I hope you are happy with that ;)

[Arsh]

Oh, of course, i`m happy with that. If you were here with you, you`d have seen that i`m just bouncing on my couch and my head`s crashing with the roof of my room. Ouch! ;)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Oh don't do that, you'll hurt yourself ;) But I'm glad your happy

[Arsh]

Lol.. you`re fascinating!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

You are too..........

[Arsh]

;)

[Valkyrie Warrior]

:)..................................