A Halloween Tale

Greetings to all the young Ghoulies looking forward to Halloween day. She draws closer with each passing day. Here is a spooky little rhyme to get you ready...enter if you dare.

A Halloween Tale 

By

Carlos Lorenzo Estrada 

I'm in shadows of a dark dreary room

a tulpa of despair and frightful doom.

What darkly tale shall I whisper to thee

Beyond candlelight; a voice you can't see

Despair is the journey I'll take you upon

Whispered by daemons in grisly foul song

A desolate road you'll never forget 

Covered in mist with monsters of threat 

There by the window red eyes do stare

Searching for children to taunt and to scare

Feel the ends of my boney fingertips 

Brushing against the softness of lips

Come with me to nightmarish abode

In dreams so aphotic and endless a road

Let us walk among gnarled and twisted of trees

Painted in violet with crimson dead leaves 

Hear the banshee's mournful sad cries

Withering souls in terror filled eyes

Hoot of an owl and screech of a bat

Growl of an angry hungry black cat

There by the graveyard I'll stand and I'll wait

Beckon you forward toward hellish cursed gate 

Give up on all hope; you'll find none of it here

For we feed upon fright, anguish, and fear 

Give up on all hope to ever find home

You belong to the night with us all alone 

And when all that is left is empty and frail 

Take heed and remember this Halloween tale.

Author's Note

My wonderous muse Cate is counting the days down till that spooky day appears. When I showed her my costume I'm planning on wearing, which is only a pink thong with a long elephant nose drapped down, she told me I was wearing it backwards. Haha on her I meant to do that.

Reviews

[JE Falcon]

I think you touched on all the hellish things and places. --- Well done.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you JE this was a fun little tribute to my favorite time of year. It was a joy to compose something hauntingly fun. A sort of shout out to my youth on a Friday night watching a local show called creature features back in the 70's. Even now re-reading it surprises me on how I was able to capture a bit of that old frightful magic on those times staying up late to watch that show. Thank you again for your comment.

[shadrach hah]

Hi Carlos, I love the content of your Halloween tale. You write it in such a creative way. The thriller of Halloween is dancing in your words. I love the flow, the rhythm and the rhyme of this wonderful piece. You know how to skillfully lead your reader through your poetry. I loved this journey through your words. Have a wonderful Wednesday....Mike.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Mike for your comment on this poem. It was my homage to my favorite time of year. Quite a few members here were in such Halloween cheer I felt it would be nice to write something for the occasion. Thank you again my friend.

[shadrach hah]

You are always welcome, Carlos. Always a pleasure to read your work. Have a wonderful Friday when it comes....Michael.

[Dylan Macadham]

This Tale scares the S**t outa me! I don't think you left any Halloween (grave) stone unturned !
...and so well crafted !
Bravo, Carlos! :)

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Dylan for the kind comment. It was a fun Halloween this year and I was happy to submit this enjoyable poem this year for the community. Already looking forward to next year. Thank you again.

[lightsong]

hhhhaaa well I wanted to review the poem but then your note forced me to laugh and note it first. aside of being this a wonderfully written poem what I really like about it is how You end it, Halloween must be about fun not despair and that's exactly what You were telling us, and IF You are looking for a Halloween Companion, Margie is the BEST, so maybe next year we will see You together walking in some (nightmarish abode in dreams so aphotic and endless a road) ;>

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I totally agree Margie is absolutely the best. Both her and Dave were prolific in their writings this year for Halloween. It was a joy to read their work. And you are absolutely correct on the ending. I wanted it to be a fun enjoyable spooky journey but not terrifying one. So I ended it with that fun little line as a reminder to the most fun and candy sweet time of the year. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this piece.

[Dave Brown]

Somehow I missed reading this
An excellent piece
I would say this takes the top award for Halloween haunts

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

You are much too kind Dave. To me both you and Margie share that top award for Halloween haunts as well as laughs with all the amazing poetry you both submitted. You both inspired many a cafe member to submit scary poetry and made the entire month fun. It was so enjoyable to watch the two of you make the month of October an awesome one this year. Thank you for making my favorite time of the year a great one with all the wonderful poetic art you shared with the community. You consistently submit funny and great work and I'm a fan of your artistic talent my friend.

[barleygirl]

Thank you, Lorenzo. I'm plum tuckered out, Dave took me on such a run for my money! Whew!

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

You both made Halloween great ths year with your funny spine tingling delights share with the community. It was an absolute joy to watch and read the prolific art you both put out. You both deserve a standing ovation for your work. You made October the absolute best this year. I never cringed and laughed so hard. Thank you both.

[R E Tree]

A very compelling read! Every word had me totally captured. I even decided to read this a few times because it was just so full of life and the flow was very charismatic. It is a very absorbing read, somehow very thought provoking as well. I find this piece quite refreshing compared to the average poem. It’s definitely entertaining in its own way. I look forward to reading more.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you R.E for the kind comment on this poem. I wrote a poem almost similar to this called "In the darkest night". Which I actually like a bit better. But my favorite is one called the serpent and the Holy Man. The philosophy and flow of that poem was truly inspiring to me. Thank you again for your ki d comment I truly appreciate it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved your Halloween tale Carlos.
"Give up on all hope; you'll find none of it here
For we feed upon fright, anguish, and fear"
The above lines were my favorite and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you CP for the kind comment I really appreciate it. This truly was inspired by some of my favorite writers like Poe, Lovecraft, and others, as well as Tales from the crypt and a Friday night show called creature features back from the 70s. Halloween is also my favorite time of year. Thank you again my friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

Me too my friend and you are are welcome. Happy Halloween.

[no tell writer]

This is wonderful, gave me some chills, Very creative. Nicely written write

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you kindly Katzie for the nice comment on this poem. I hope your Halloween night is going great with lots of fun with family and friends.

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

Lovely poem u've got there Carlos , got the whispers and chills already, hope u had a gr8 Halloween 🎃 ...

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Kathy for your sweet comment on this poem I truly appreciate it. So far it's been an enjoyable Halloween night and I hope yours is a fun one as well. Thank you so much.

[Fran Marie]

A chilling Halloween tale
liked the rhyme in your
lines a smooth read..
I much enjoyed reading
this tale ....

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Fran I really appreciate the comment. I felt simplicity best suited this write, as opposed to another of my writings "in the darkest night" which had a darker dread to it. This one was meant to be pay homage to the horror influences of my life in literature and film. Yet also be accessible to a much younger audience, to a point haha. I think my 8 yr old self might have had a little trouble sleeping if my grandmother read this to me. All in all this was such a fun piece to write because I love Halloween. It literally is my favorite time of year. Thank you again Fran.