In Brevity

Brevity is a word I have been hearing a lot in conversations. My muse took inspiration from this beautiful word creating this poem

In Brevity 

By

Carlos Lorenzo Estrada 

"Yesterday's the past, tomorrow's the future, but today is a gift. That's why it's called the present." Bill keane

I remember yesterday, as if it were today.

Seconds pass to minutes, as moments slip away

A Sea that never changes, reflects its immortality 

A heart that never loves; mirrors Incongruity 

Captured shades of amber through sunsets in repose.

Impermanence viewed in shadows; as day comes to a close.

We breathe for but an instant; as time winds its way down

How many more will we take before its final sound?

Disavow all abnegation; to live without reproach.

Seize the moments of this life, live love at ends approach.

Become the sea...

In brevity.

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading this poem feel free to leave your thoughts and comments below.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

'we are in time a mote of dust
a pin prick in an ocean sky'

Yes, we are fleeting in the overall picture of things. Might as well, make every minute count, we are a long time dead. I wrote on this theme myself.

Really like this poem Carlos. One of your best. Love those little bits of meaningful brevity.

Chris

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you so much Chris for your thoughts on this work. I really love the theme of this poem and feel such a close association in its belief. It was my hope the reader would feel how finite life is but also how infinite the possibilities are within this short existence. Thank you so much again for your thoughts I truly value them.

[Terry]

This poem is the first time I read something about the mortality of life without my thanatophobia acting up. The execution of tone is very well done!

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Terry for the kind comment I truly appreciate it. This poem is becoming one of my personal favorites to be honest because I so believe in its message. Thank you again.

[barleygirl]

This wasn't exactly brevity, in my opinion, but I don't even like brief poems. I love it when a poet spills it all out there, as you've done. The essence of living! Being a rhyme & rhythm freak myself, I love how you perfected it in this poem (((HUGS)))

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you barleygirl for sharing your thoughts on this poem. I really appreciate it.

[Fran Marie]

carpe diem; for tomorrow is not promised
to anyone...in the great scheme of things
we are but mere specs; a grain of sand and
time waits not..the sea is an eternal poem
a beautiful piece here Carlos ..nice work

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Fran for your comment on this piece. I truly appreciate it. This has become one of my favorites because of its message.

[LostSage]

To be brief... I like reading you. Keep writing!

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you my friend I truly appreciate the kind comment. I will continue to do my best at producing more art and hope that you do the same as well because your voice is just as important if not more then mine. Looking forward to reading more of your art too. Thank you again.

[LostSage]

I am new here on this website. I really don't know how to work it. You are the first person I met. I am glad

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Welcome my friend I too am still kind of new as well. I have only been here since about May. It is a very welcoming place and wonderful community of writers. Don't be afraid to share your work and most importantly your thoughts on this art of writing. Read the works of others and if it moves you let the writers know. I myself always seek to pay back what this community has given to me. In doing so I have made new friendships from all over the world and it makes me a better person and writer. So speak your truth and be true to both you and your writing. Thank you my friend for sharing your thoughts with me.

[LostSage]

I like the way you use the phrase "my friend" very nice you are my new friend how very nice and kind I will never be far from you my friend

[Lourdes Pessetto]

"Become the sea", beautiful. Why "seize the moments of this life." Time is the theft of our lives-every second counts. It takes quite a journey to realize how often we take for granted the gift of each breath we take. Thank you Carlos for sharing poetry from the soul!

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Lourdes for your kind words on this poem. You are absolutely correct on this work. We do take for granted the time we have in this life. Despite the truth being it is very brief compared to the things that are timeless. I had mentioned before to someone way back as a little boy I can remember before starting summer vacation I told a best friend of mine I would see him when we got back from the break. He would be run over and killed by a drunk driver. That was the first time as a small little boy experiencing what death meant. This poem written over 40 years later reminds me of my little friend. And all the other who I have lost through the years. So I will try to be the sea for them. Thank you so much for your thoughts.

[Einstein Noodle]

oooooooooo well done Carlos .. such a fine natural rhythm and rhyme with deep wisdom shared .. my cup of tea sir! simply beautiful!!
E.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you, E, I truly appreciate the kind words. My muse worked hard for this one and it's rapidly becoming one of my favorites. It is a simple message I believe in whole heartedly. Thank you so much my friend for the nice comment. I truly appreciate it.

[mattavelli]

Hello, Carlos! :)
I feel this could have been said in fewer words. :p
Thanks for sharing.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I had thought about the title and then only a single period that would represent the whole poem, but I wasn't sure if it would confuse with its pure sublime thought or label me simply pretentious. So I considered the unlazy route instead. Thank you my friend for comment. Ps..when are we going to get some more new work from you?

[mattavelli]

My pleasure!
I am not writing now.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

For shame Matt. You should be writing you have a talent for poetry and writing as well. I hope there is nothing stifling your voice because it's obvious you have a lot of art inside you ready to come out. Take a moment for yourself even if it's 5 minutes a day and write 1 sentence. You're a writer you should be writing, but those are just my thoughts. Thanks again.

[mattavelli]

Its too hot out to write.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Omg Matt you big baby haha. It literally burning up here in calif, like fire wise, and I am still writing. Ok you do you boo. Haha. Write when you can. Not me, but an actual piece of writing lol

[mattavelli]

when you can

[albee]

I love a poem with chewy nutritious Haiku like stanzas.
My favorite:

“Impermanence viewed in shadows; as day comes to a close.”

Like Dickinson’s “Certain Slant of Light…when it comes the Landscape listens, Shadows hold their Breath…”

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Albee for the kind review on this poem. It was an enjoyable write to be honest. I love that Dickinson quote it reminds me of why I love writing so much. When writing I feel most strive to elicit emotional or thoughtful memory response from the reader. We want our words to resonate long after the last word read. If I could accomplish that in any writing of mine then I'm satisfied with the end result. Unfortunately I'm left often thinking I could have done more, but we writers are often the worst critics of our work. Thankfully hearing from a kind person that they enjoyed the work makes me feel a little better so thank you so much. I truly appreciate your time and the nice comment you left, I feel satisfied this poem worked.

[albee]

“Yo soy un hombre sincero…and before I die, I want to exhale the verses of the soul…” Jose Marti

[Lorry]

Everything is borrowed, even this quote. All we have is now and by the time you read this, that will be replaced by a new now, now.
I think my head just melted! 😊

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Lorry for your thoughts on this poem. You are right there will be a new now. Time in this world may be fleeting but live for those moments in the limited time we have and make them last forever.

[Betty Hermelee]

It seems like we are not on this earth for long so time means a lot to us; also there is much impermanence surrounding us, that we must hurry and make the most out of the life we have; live your life and love to the fullest; I love your little brevity’s; each one is quite meaningful and they somehow connect with each other.
Lovely
Best
B.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Thank you Betty truly from my heart I am appreciative of your thoughts on this work and the intention of its meaning. Your writer's eye and words best exemplify the puzzle I had wished to convey with this piece. We must love for the moment and make it last forever.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're most welcome!