-Misery-

Me Philosophy.

It is as if I'd been blitzed by sorcery my soul drainned of its purity.

Hade's vile hands has hardened my heart, all I have come to love are no longer be, all vanished like the sweet morning dew, devoured away by the hounds of hell.

My devilish soul unable to sustain this perilous emotion called love.

Ah! The sacrifices I've given for the sake of knowledge, but nonetheless I must remain in the company of my demons.

 

Reviews

[Christy]

I love, "Nevertheless, I must remain in the company of my demons." That's a brilliant line and one I'll be using for a while. I'd suggest breaking this into actual poetry form. Split lines make it much easier to read and settle thoughts. I had to read it a few times to grasp everything you were saying since it runs together so. Add punctuation between "blitzed by sorcery" and "my soul drained of its purity" (I'd suggest a semi-colon). "Had" should be "has," for "has hardened." "Are no longer be" is iffy syntax; try something like, "all I have come to love / No longer exists." Add a comma after "knowledge" and you'll be pretty set. This is a great start to what could be a really awesome short piece. Well done!

[Amanda Naomi]

wow....this is dark! and very intense......

my favorite line: "Hade's vile hands had hardened my heart, all I have come to love are no longer "

Kudos! You are one talented writer!

[Jane Doe]

Wonderfully descriptive, I can so relate to this piece. Absolutely fantastic, each line a treasure!

[Rhine Wolf]

The decisions that we make all ways come back to us. ether to haunt or praise!

Blessed be.
Fallon.

[Grace Lea]

This is a really good piece, and one I can certainly identify with. Every line speaks truth.

[WV_Poetess]

I really like this piece, especially this line: My devilish soul unable to sustain this perilous emotion called love. I have felt that way, still do at times. I've often wondered if I lived before and committed a heinous crime toward man or humanity that has followed me like a black cloud into my present existence. Ah, but then I wake up and the sun is shining and I am forced to face the world again to give life one more opportunity. You are a very good writer and it's nice to meet you through your words.

[~The Queen~]

I liked the feeling I could practicly feel coming off the page. ^^ Very well done, very well written and I hope to see much more.

[poet2angels (lynda)]

Deep ...
I love the use of imagery and metaphor here...

Lynda