-Soul Lost-

Me Philosophy.

 

By the wrath of the ancient gods how I despise my gullibility, after vainly seeking the immaculate knowledge of which I'd hoped would set me free.

All I am  left with are painful memories of the man I once was and a vile premonition of the man I am to be. Bloody hell, how could I'd allowed my curiosity to overwhelm my dignity I whom once was the pillar of logic.

Reviews

[Kris]

You know, I've read a few of your pieces so far and I have to say, I don't particularly like them. Undoubtedly you have some very specific thoughts you wish to express, and while none of your words are particularly difficult to understand, when your "poems" are one or two sentences filled with multisyllabic words, regardless of what it is you're trying to say, it just reads pompous. You may laugh, but I can't imagine someone reading some of your pieces out loud without doing it in an uppity English accent. Also, you may want to check some of your grammar and spelling and syntax, as I've noticed several errors. You also have some punctuation errors. "Overwhelmed" should be overwhelm. "Hope" should be "hoped". Your first comma should be removed or the sentence restructured. There should be a comma after "Bloody hell" or you need to restructure the sentence.

Anyway, cheers.

[Enigma]

Altogether a new style of writing for me...
Won't comment on grammar or anything, but I still find it rather interesting... ^_^
Well done!

[TheGhost]

your poems really identify with my feelings.
as i see it, your writing are all expressing of how life could have been if other things
wouldn't have happened. in my opinion it seems like you are mixing up 2 different lives
in your poems which makes it interesting to read. but there is always a soul that is
trapped in the other world so i see it as if you have two different souls.

But what i really like about your poems is that these two worlds will
never meet and they will always go parallel, you talk about the present/past/future but you
always have 2 worlds out there. that's really emotionally developed. and
that feelings are much beyond words.

(:

[Blackrose]

Interesting :) I've read three or four of you poems to this moment and find them all quite interesting :) While I don't neccessarily agree with basically.. wel... almost all of what you say, a different philosphical type of view is indeed quite nice to listen too :) Thanks for sharing!

[Greg Skura]

Very different style than most poems i have read! Your style is unique compared to other poets and you always tackle interesting topics! Thank You for sharing!

[Too Simple a Simon]

By the wrath of the ancient gods how I despise my gullibility after vainly seeking the immaculate knowledge of which I had hoped would set me free. All I am left with are painful memories of the man I once was and a vile premonition of the man I am to be. Bloody hell, how could I have allowed my curiosity to overwhelm my dignity, I, whom once was the pillar of logic.

Provided a few edits, if you want them. An interesting write.

T'SaS

[EmpressPoetess]

Achingly genius!

[Katherine Wyatt]

"how could I'd allowed my curiosity to overwhelm my dignity I whom once was the pillar of logic." You are an amazing writer.. What a phenomenal line!

[~Mariposa Una Lila~]

I really like your work...well done my new friend!
x0

[Chirpy!]

I think the Big Words really work with this writing.
But, I would change "bloody hell", it doesn't seem to fit.
Also, I would add something after "I whom once was the pillar of logic." like "Am now a ...."
Just my thoughts.

[Frank F. Atanacio]

Powerful one word