I Truly Don't Belong Here

I Truly Don't Belong Here

A Poem by Prototato

I truly don't belong here
Nobody can hold me dear
Started when I was only 4 years
Continued to this very time here
Everywhere, I pull up the rear
Hide from every single peer
All run from my personality sheer
Far too many find me to be queer
And seemingly invoking nothing but fear
I inevitably shed a tear
Forgetting the voices that I hear
As I turn to life, and begin to leer
Off the path of success I veer
Finally falling to the bottom tier
Nobody giving me their ears
And alas, as I look in the mirror
All I can see is darkness near.

I truly don't belong here.

© 2017 Prototato


Author's Note

Prototato
I won't be tagging my poetry; I don't think it's good enough to have earned them, so those of you lucky enough to look at my profile will get a chance to cringe at my poor poetry! 🤣

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If your poetry was dreadful, you would have been too ashamed to post. You know you're an excellent writer. Confidence is not wrong, just accept the truth. :)

This feeling is worldwide. The mere fact that every writer on this site has written poetry expressing the same concept, proves it. Since you're a fine writer, I dare you to write something new. Bless my feed with your brilliant mind and a different concept.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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The idea and story that goes along with the poem is beautiful and I can see many people including myself can relate to it but I would try to have more substance instead of just continuously rhyming off of one word...
Other than that it is very good!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Prototato

6 Years Ago

That’s actually one of the things I criticized myself the most for in this poem. Fun facts
Cringe? Not likely, this is very, very cool and quite achievement rhyming every line and keeping it in context. Some lines are choppy, but if it was spoken - say rapped or slam poetry, the speaker could speed up or slow down to make it work. Carry on, young poet, carry on....

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this sounds like it would be a hella epic rap though neat piece

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoyed the rhyming scheme within your poem but honestly it seems to be a bit... flat? It's saying a lot and the appearance of the poem is quite large but it doesn't seem to hold and a lot of substance. Perhaps for this poem and other writings you might want to show more. I'm sorry if this review seems a bit unhelpful but this is honestly the best I can say.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Prototato

7 Years Ago

Indeed.
Here, this may be a bit easier to understand than that jumble I posted above:
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Aeco

7 Years Ago

Did you construct a poem around this? Or did you create this "summary" in restrospect?
Prototato

7 Years Ago

I did construct the poem around it.
I was actually in that kind of a dead mood when I wrote .. read more
NO NO NO ITS GREAT POETRY

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Promised a cringe, I confess myself disappointed..no cringes to be found but a couple of eye-brows raised at your impressive poem! One rhyme throughout a poem is difficult to harness successfully but you've achieved it.
Not that I'm one to talk but it's worth thinking about your punctuation and the rhythm of your middle lines but a fantastic poem keep 'em coming.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

If your poetry was dreadful, you would have been too ashamed to post. You know you're an excellent writer. Confidence is not wrong, just accept the truth. :)

This feeling is worldwide. The mere fact that every writer on this site has written poetry expressing the same concept, proves it. Since you're a fine writer, I dare you to write something new. Bless my feed with your brilliant mind and a different concept.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

It's not poor poetry, it's actually pretty good. Anything that expresses emotions in a different yet beautiful manner is good poetry. Remember, practice makes perfect, so keep writing!! Well done!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Prototato
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Little Canada, MN



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