lumière fanée

Please correct my French if you see any issues

Englishdans le noir
je ne cherche la lumière la plus brillante
car je recherche une lumière pour correspondre à ma propre
ma lumière est fanée
ma lumière est faible
mais ma lumière brille dans les ténèbres
je cherche une lumière qui a été à travers tout cela
i lumière qui a refusé de brûler

Reviews

[Sapientiam]

While I am learning French, I am not the best at corrections. I do have a question with the last line. You said "i lumière qui a refusé de brûler", but did you mean to say "une lumière qui refuse de brûler", which means "a light that refuses to burn"? Other than that, I believe everything else looks fine.

I found this poem very beautiful and heartfelt. The light described is exceptionally vivid. I found it better that this was written in French instead of English... Something about the way French sounds off the tongue. Great job!

[Lord of mad men]

Its to be i light that has refused to burn out but I not good at French this was written with what little I know and a French book used to translate so I not so good. I have learned this words. Thank you for you kind words. Good luck with the French.

[Sapientiam]

Oh, if that's what you meant, then never mind. You're welcome, and thank you!

[ReedWrite]

I wish I could correct your French...I couldn't resist looking at this poem. The title intrigued me. I love French...it's a beautiful language, but I can't write or read or speak more than a few words. I hope someone who can, finds this poem and comments.

[Lord of mad men]

That's okay thanks for your kind words.