My heart

Rain on the windows

Comeing down

Fast and slow

Inside warm

Outside cold

My heart

In my heart

I am warm near you

Outside i am cold

With without

Your touch

Reviews

[William Liston]

You've written a very intriguing piece ... it produces a strong emotional impact for its length and I felt myself become more entranced with each line ... nicely done. I enjoy the effect you've created in this piece -- it's a unique one where the words seem to "fly at you" (if that makes sense). The description and imagery, though a little vague, really compliments the poem as a whole. I must say, you've done well with this piece.

If I may critique, I think you should consider some different choices in the visual presentation. Although the poem itself is good, the font you've chosen is quite boring. I'd suggest using Georgia size 12 font. It is (in my opinion) the best font this site has to offer.

Also, I noticed some typos. The word "comeing" in the second line needs to be spelled "coming." The "i" in the third-to-last line needs to be capitalized, and "with" in the second to last line is redundant.

Fix those simple errors, and this will really be marvelous. Thanks for sharing.

- William Liston

[Silmara McGarry]

Really beautiful and touching!

[Lord of mad men]

Thank you very much for reading it and taking your time to write a review.

[Silmara McGarry]

You are most welcome! ;-)

[Angel of the devil]

powerful and beautiful ;)

[Lord of mad men]

thank you for reading and reviwing a large amount of my work

[Angel of the devil]

your welcome. I enjoy reading your writing

[Lord of mad men]

i enjoy reading your aswell.

[Angel of the devil]

thank you!