Very nice use of words. A burning candle waiting for the day to change. Could be a storm or worst? I will return later to read more. Grandchildren had showed-up. Thank you for sharing your words and thoughts.
Coyote
That's quite a statement. A candle can represent love which in this case would be its strength when those storms of life pound the psyche with doubts and fears.
Very well done, Ghost.
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
That's a lovely interpretation of it! Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment. F.. read moreThat's a lovely interpretation of it! Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment. Feel free to review one of my newer pieces!
It is important to be a flame ever present to the world... where
hope is universal and wants to be reflected across oceans of versatility
to become tethered in a divine reunion of faith hope and charity. truly, Pat
the beauty of short poems are that it leaves the reader wanting more or wondering. Asks a lot of questions. This poem reminds me of a small and fragile tin shed, with an occupant and candle. In the middle of a stormy pier or forest. Love it, great work! x
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
That's very close to the image that was in my head :) Thank you !
Well, once I went to Scotland and stayed in the most beautiful lodge onlooking a really beautiful la.. read moreWell, once I went to Scotland and stayed in the most beautiful lodge onlooking a really beautiful lake. So basically the image was of my sitting in the lodge with a candle in front of the window, looking at the storm on the sea :)
10 Years Ago
wow! Sounds really romantic as well, like it could be in a romance novel!
You obviously like to write very short pieces.
I'd like to read a longer piece from you as I think it could be very interesting.
Another short yet visually excellent write.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
I do haha. I should try that, you know. Thank you! :)
lovely, I like to write these short poems, it is such a satisfying thing to do, this one has a kind of mystery for me, it poses questions, who's in the room, where is this room, feels like a lonely house on a misty moor, a lot of things can come from the short poems that's the beauty of them, yours is exceptional :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Wow, thank you so much Mr Beevor! Much appreciated :)
10 Years Ago
Please do call me Richard, its much better, i'm not special just another rhyming fool haha
10 Years Ago
Hahaha from your writing I thought you were a litracy teacher which is why I called you Mr Beevor. A.. read moreHahaha from your writing I thought you were a litracy teacher which is why I called you Mr Beevor. Anyway, have a good day Richard! :)
10 Years Ago
you to Hungry....er Ghost ? Maybe you need to eat more haha
Hahaha, trust me: I eat enough. Hungry ghosts is actually a Japanese Buddhist legend. Read about it,.. read moreHahaha, trust me: I eat enough. Hungry ghosts is actually a Japanese Buddhist legend. Read about it, it's extremely interesting. Hungry ghost is also the name of one of my favourite bands :)
10 Years Ago
ah, ha daylight dawns, will check out japanese buddhist legend sounds like something I will enjoy
what a warm, radiant, inviting, comforting image... It says a lot, yet says little... It leaves it open for the reader to take it where they want to, which is beautiful and brilliant at the same time. you have a lot of skill for 15... I am impressed.. I really enjoyed this glimpse into your writing and cannot wait to read more.. the tone and imagery you created was so lovely... awesome job...