The Garden

This is a poem I wrote for a contest. Where we have to describe a color without saying the name of the color. So let me know if anyone can guess the color. I kind of went with the violet/purple/blue

As we walk the garden's path

We are free from yesterday's dueling wrath

We see such precious blossoms

That were tended with such care

As we enjoy the lavender flavored air

We linger on purpose there and here

We saw such iris beauties

And your favorite forget-me-not cuties

You showed me sweet affection

And I vowed you my forever protection

We laughed and we spoke until the

Morning glories folded to sleep

And your eyes began to weep

However, I made my promise

whether at land or sea

You will always be with me

Reviews

[Maryam Mottahedeh]

This is a sweet one. The only suggestion I have is to perhaps consider a break into verses... in the first few lines you speak in present tense and then you go to past tense. Perhaps a break there would serve as a mental pivot to another part/perspective of the garden and the path.... and then you have the nice ending to bring it back full circle to the present. I like that

[Phantom Heart]

I just read it over and I didn't even realize that I switched from past to present tense! Thanks for pointing that out. I think that you are right.

[MAC]

what a visually beautiful write filled with sweet thoughts. excellent poem!

[Phantom Heart]

I appreciate you reading.

[Chris]

Violet, Purple, and blue...three shades of dear.

[Phantom Heart]

Thank you. :)

[FrancescaX]

I like the last two lines. I think it flows better as a single verse. The poems felt like honey to me.

I like.

[Phantom Heart]

Thank you FrancescaX. I appreciate your reading!

[FrancescaX]

you are welcome

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful journey you took me with you in the poem. I like the places you took me and the ending.
"However, I made my promise
whether at land or sea
You will always be with me"
The above words are promises made to be kept. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Phantom Heart]

Thank you so much! And thank you for stopping by and reading!

[Eagle Cruagh]

I enjoyed the walk thrugh this beautiful
garden. Your tender vocabulary brings
joy with smiles to the exciting colors
along the path.
Thank you for a delidous treat.
---- Eagle Cruagh

[Phantom Heart]

Thank you very much.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

"We laughed and we spoke until the
Morning glories folded to sleep."

I love the word choice here. Simply lovely. :)

[Phantom Heart]

Thanks Blue!

[WILDERNESS]

Ah , simple things in life bring the most pleasure, as the lovers' walk in the garden ............ v nice poem Morgan.

[Phantom Heart]

Thanks for reading! :)

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That was very beautiful Morgan very beautiful! I loved this part, And your favorite forget me not cuties :) That made me smile real big there! I stop saving poems to put in the ole library,Id rather place them in my heart with all the others cause there I know there kept safe and sound,So yeah theres one to lock away my friend:)

[Phantom Heart]

Thank you. I was reading it over and I think that it could use some polishing, but I am thankful that you enjoyed it! I usually write dark, strange things, but I have been trying to writer nicer and happier. This one was for a contest on here about describing a color without saying the name of the color, I don't know if I really hit on that! but I had fun writing it today! Thank you for reading!

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Well I saw all the colors and was truly beautiful to me I wouldn't change a thing gosh its too good Morgan. I been writing some different stuff trying too anyways so I understand, But yes its beautiful and needs nothing my friend:)