Strange Geogrphics

What it might look like to people....

There's night blooming jasmine

In an abandoned asylum

In and overgrown forest

In a lobotomized brain

There's a morning mist

In a forgotten quarry

A lone paradise

In a multiple personality

There's a welcoming light

In the starry heavens

Just out of reach

After hours of shock therapy

There's a rust colored run off

Poisoning a beautiful lake

Arising a deep depression

In the eyes of a sociopath

There's a desk in an office

Seating a megalomanic doctor

With alternate intentions

Trying to satiate his visceral lust

Author's Note

Just a poem inspired by looking at pictures of abandoned places.

Reviews

[Chris]

The scent of cloves permeates my mind as I listen to this.

[Phantom Heart]

Thanks. Thanks for reading.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Very interesting, it sounds like maybe the place was arranged to be perceived as that, or maybe that is what the espectators where programmed to expect before they got there.

Awesome writing style, enjoyable to read.

[Phantom Heart]

Thanks. It was difficult to try to convey the message about each stanza being a different mental disorder. Thanks for reading! :) BTW not all of my writings are this solemn. :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Is good to meet an author with valuable standards.

[Phantom Heart]

Thanks. That was nice of you.

[Baby Ricochet]

Loved it! Some brilliant imagery in this one. Outstanding work!

[Phantom Heart]

Thanks, baby! :)

[Phantom Heart]

Each paragraph is designated to a specific condition etc...I was exploring the dark. It's meant to be taken in a way that makes the reader feel how awful it was for someone to be in an asylum. And how some doctors weren't good doctors.

[WILDERNESS]

Thats a lot Psychotic rambling there, a troubled soul perhaps .............. got dark in the end, nah?

[Phantom Heart]

My thought was how people were tortured or given treatments that never worked n the doctors that were bad. I thought the idea went well with what I was researching; abandoned places. The time in history of asylums was terrible and the ill were treated terrible.

[Phantom Heart]

It's supposed to be dark, lonely and upsetting. I guess I accomplished that. Thanks for stopping by and reading.

[WILDERNESS]

I see. Having read your comments the poem has become more meaningful to me now. The sickness and treatment of mind has always been difficult subject. I've no experience of such things other than the movies, but they do still exist; i guess.

[Phantom Heart]

I think its much better these days. The movies do make it seem terrible though. I just read this article on how many of the asylums were so over crowded that patients would perish and for days no one would notice. The conditions were awful! Thanks for reading and taking your time on this one! :)

[WILDERNESS]

Welcome dear, thanks for sharing .........

[Maryam Mottahedeh]

Oooo, I like it.. the sense of repeating message in a different form each time, from a different perspective, takes the idea deeper in and brings more understanding. Powerful format.