The perfect Pearl

The perfect Pearl

A Poem by Phantom Heart

The rise of glorious dawn
Slumbers the sweet somber
In abstract self-esteem
The intensity of emotional frustration
Seems a continuous tide
Of esoteric clarity
With bouts of self-denial and critique
Short lives the abundance of
Luxurious poisons
Inebriated ideologies and impressions
In all life's advancements and inventions
Is a vast ocean of opaque beauty
That lies the true alchemist
Turning sand into the perfect pearl 

© 2012 Phantom Heart


Author's Note

Phantom Heart
Just read about alchemists and how people want to turn things into gold...When so many things in life are already creating amazing things that are looked over everyday. Not on my computer, so picture to come.

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"Short lives the abundance of
Luxurious poisons
Inebriated ideologies and impressions
In all life's advancements and inventions"

Inebriated ideologies! I like your play with words! I like the way you delivered your message without pounding with a sledge hammer! Gracefully and beautifully written!


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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If you had not explained the poem I don't think I would have understood it. The wording is truly lovely but I was lost for the meaning, until the end. Yes, the true alchemist. If only we could learn a lesson from her!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Phantom Heart

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading!
A lovely poem with a beautiful beginning and a beautiful ending...SyberRose

Posted 11 Years Ago


Phantom Heart

11 Years Ago

Thank you!
The contradictory word compositions that you employ in your poem in the context of the general theme of the transfiguration of some trifle into an object of beauty and worth are more than moderately efficacious. It was almost arduous, mentally comparing the antithetical pairs such as "sweet somber" and "esoteric clarity", the words being so disparate. My heart was rent asunder as I attempted to marry sweet to somber; my figurative eyes strained to view what was not withheld from their vision as I contemplated what the compound "esoteric clarity" denoted. Well done! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Phantom Heart

11 Years Ago

Thank you. My great grandmother was a Rosicrucian and their "esoteric" society inspired me to write .. read more
Less is more,
I loved your statement here
Morgan... you're such a wordsmith
Of gold itself, who needs more?
It's greedy, and selfish, you did this so well!

- Elisa

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Turning sand into the perfect pearl". This is what writers have been doing since the beginning of time. Transforming something that is rough and neutral colored into a smooth, glowing thing of beauty is what all of us long to do.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Short lives the abundance of
Luxurious poisons
Inebriated ideologies and impressions
In all life's advancements and inventions"

Inebriated ideologies! I like your play with words! I like the way you delivered your message without pounding with a sledge hammer! Gracefully and beautifully written!


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is beautiful, I love the thought behind it and the message that the world is a beautiful place and that in nature miracles happen every day we just don't always see them.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Phantom Heart

11 Years Ago

You got every point!!! :)
Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Awesome :)
Morgan, your diction is off the charts and I love it. The creation of a pearl is truly a beautiful thing. My favorite part of the poem "The rise of glorious dawn
Slumbers the sweet somber
In abstract self-esteem" Just genius my fellow poet. Write on!

Chaos_Collector

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Phantom Heart

11 Years Ago

Thanks! That review made my day!
Chaos_Collector

11 Years Ago

You're welcome! I'm glad I could make your day!
Hi Morgan! I love that line of "turning sand into the perfect pearl"... it says it all! What a conclusion! Thanks for turning me on the site:) M

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Phantom Heart

11 Years Ago

Thanks and I hope you enjoy this site!
So this one of those pieces where you need to read between the lines.
Nice work.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Phantom Heart

12 Years Ago

I wrote it with the thought that Everyone is always trying to make lead into gold and make the world.. read more
Mauricio Montoya

12 Years Ago

keep on writing.

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Added on October 27, 2012
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Phantom Heart
Phantom Heart

Phoenix, AZ



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