The Key

I wonder why I can't be loved;

Is something wrong with me?

When I look in the mirror

Do I see what others see?

A man longing for affection and love

Searching for answers from far above

I didn't hear a thing, to the questions asked

My pain and misery seem very well masked

Trying to find love in a world of none

Trying to find hope in the eyes of someone

Not knowing where or what I'm searching for

I'll know when I find you

You'll hold the key to my every door

Reviews

[Grace Catherine C.]

Ironically enough this is exactly how I feel right about now.
The content is good, very honest and relatable
don't be so eager to make perfect rhyme schemes though, forced rhyming makes a poem feel flat and unnatural, let it breathe more freely

[dw817]

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When you look in the mirror, Lonesome, do you see what others see ?
I can answer this. No. You will see a horrid looking person, someone who is mean to others, inconsiderate, rude, careless - someone no-one wants to be next to. A loathsome idiot.

... and you'll be wrong. How we view ourselves is quite a bit different than how others view us. We are often too critical and too judgmental of ourselves. But there is a solution. The next time you look in the mirror, imagine that instead of viewing you, you are viewing someone who wants to BE like you.

And think of the positive qualities this time. The affection you've shown, the kindness you've shared, the compassion you've given - and imagine you are viewin someone who wants to be like you because of the GOOD in you.

All these things we often completely forget when examining ourselves under the careful and critical countenance of a mirror.

And yes, if you are a lock (and you must choose to be the lock), then someone somewhere does have the key to open you. No-one is ever a lock without allowing someone else to be the key, I have found in my experiences.

[Michael Stevens]

pushing loneliness with your mighty pen!

[Death Girl]

I have always wondered if I am seeing the same thing that others see.

[Rita L. Sev]

There is a saying that there is a "lid for every pot; a key for every lock". It's the wait for these things to complete us that is so hard. Good rhyme and flow to this piece, Timmy. (Hope you don't mind the use of your name - I just cannot refer to such a fine writer as "loser"...) :)

[Leticia]

It has good images and i can feel the emotions running threw the poem

[Chrys_Pap]

very well expressed! nice work..

[B-poet]

I liked the overall written theme here. This piece was put together in a meaningful & clever way. Great job. :)

[Barbara Walker]

This expresses your thoughts and feelings well, but I wouldn't look to someone else to be the key to every door. When you look for others to fulfill you, you neglect the one you must nurture the most-yourself. When we are comfortable in our own skin and love ourselves, then we can love others and love will be returned to us.

[Avinash]

A brilliant write...but its not others its you who need to first know and love yourself. The outward love is too fickle to contain you no matter how intense it appears.