Sideshow

My morbid and twisted mind ...

Sneaks up on me sometimes

My dark mind so sick and bent

Waiting on Hell, where I'll surly be sent

My blood spills on the floor, red starts to flow

Destined to become the one man sideshow

The light slowly fading from my eyes

As all societies people slowly pass by

Can they see me ... Does anybody truly care

About the anguish in my mind, and all the despair

Here I go, its all total darkness now

Death creeps in as I take my final bow

Here it comes I cannot wait

Finally, to be out of this place

I hate it here and want to go

Say Goodbye ... to the one man sideshow

Reviews

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Immaculate flow and rhyming, I've always enjoyed the dark thoughts being put to words. Some work on punctuations here... Love it

[Hannah E. M.]

Very dark... but definitely well written. Very touching in an odd way. Well done.

[TL Boehm]

wow - this is a formidable write and I can relate to that feeling of loss, of being a side show. Waiting on hell.

[Astro]

As a character experiment, in the 'vein' of fiction this is very good. The flow and images are seamless in the design. Well done. There is a typo in the word "surly" which should be 'surely'. If this is a cry for help though, I hope that your personal expression is picked up by someone who is nearby that can help you with whatever is plaguing you to the point of wanting it all to end. All I can say, is that the tree of life is fraught with knots and branches sometimes rot and fall away, but roots are strong and canopies sway but don't always break against the forces of the wind. Stay strong and feed your soul so that it can grow each day instead of withering away. Peace.

[smilempsn]

Nice but dark..

Loved the flow and end...

[BL]

The dark side beckons us all every now and then and its hard not to give in to our evil inner twin!
Brilliantly put there is much intrigue and suspense in this and also the shock of realising what is happening.

[icelandicblue]

Your rhyming is fabulous and it allows the poem to flow and unfold for the reader. I understand the sideshow aspect. The dark side of life can swallow you whole. Nice to read you.

[redflutterby]

Dark..with a sense of finality! Life takes too much from us sometimes.

[Barbara Walker]

Great structure in this piece and rhymes and rhythm. A sad poem. but I can relate. Sometimes, ya just want to go home!

[Hypnos]

I can say this with certainty . So long as you have not done anything like robbery or killing a man;you will free from the fields of punishment my friend. Just hang in there.