No lifeguard on Duty

This room is dense

I can't move, think, feel or live

inside it

I stretch the walls of this dark place

until they strain 

tiny bits of shimmering white seep through

And that's where I bide

on the outskirts

I Squint to see through grayish walls

I command my limbs to reach out

SLIP. FALL.

CRACK MY HEAD.

The eerieness inside me releases

and I drown

Reviews

[Yo Diggity]

I'm going to assume that you're using drowning as a metaphor here. As an introvert I found this piece easy to identify with. I hope solace has found you. Nice job.

[fireblossom]

Nice work. Clear and effective.

[Mahesh Chand Sharma]

Its really amazing,great feeling.

[Nothing Personal]

Trapped in a cell, a physical one or a mind's cell allegory. The imagery reflects the frustration and angst in a visually understanding way creating the power of image over words. I really like the 2nd and the final stanza here.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very powerful poem, great imagery!

[ChristianM]

Very intense. This is one of my worst fears. For I almost drowned once. You captured the feeling perfectly.

[Kaylor Mason]

I can definitely identify with this poem

[Tony]

In an unknown or strange environment life can really overwhelm us with feelings of helplessness.
The imagery brought to mind someone who works in a busy office with those little cubicles while being swamped by phone calls and one copy machine per twenty people.
Your descriptions can move the reader to imagine just about any confining situation which is really cool.

[Claude]

This piece speaks to me of drowning- literally or figuratively. I like how the organization aides the ideas. Nicely done!

[Champagne]

Seems like there are multiple thoughts in the poem. There is the allusion to the tightness all around and the wanting to escape, but I also think there is some loneliness that is reflected here. Quite intense poetry.