Happy

A small poem with a lot of errors and misgivings.

I dream and still I find no confort. 

In assembly I find my faith.

I stay as long as I can cut

These strings into equally long rings.

I breathe steadfast so I can

Breathe as longer as you.

I trim these dots, they 'come squares

And I'm happy as hell in this fairy tale.

Reviews

[MOON]

Very good, happy as hell in this fairy tale like this line.

[The White Wolf]

"cut these strings into equally long rings"...this line really stands out to me. Perhaps because I think of drawing straws and it makes me realize how much happier life would be if all the straws were the same size. Simple but made me think and I like that. Good job.

[wyrd]

I like the line I trim these dots, they come squares. No doubt I shall be scribbling it down in a note book some where. I enjoyed the poem though I think you have at least three poems began here. would love to see you take a single line and explore the theme more fully.

[Coyote Poetry]

Many thoughts in this poem. Sometime we re-shape our world to find some sort of happiness. Each statement open the door to thoughts and things to ponder. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote