Black and White

Another thing written for a contest

Black and White

 

My dreams are white

As snow,

My love is black

As Night.

 

Can the moon die

In White,

Or the Sun die

In Black?

 

Kiss the world in

Black lipstick,

But kiss your enemy

In white.

Revenge is sweet

When white.

It leaves a trail

Of Black.

 

Say a prayer

In black,

But whisper once

In White.

 

Dreams are colors

Not White.

Love is pale,

Not black.

Author's Note

Wrap your mind around this one ;)

Reviews

[Brytt]

Wrap, or warp?

Anyway, There are a lot of things I like about this. You have a lot of use of black and white, but what I really love is the contrast that you put between the two. Even more so, you contradict yourself at the end, removing the image of black and white as universal and replacing it instead with hues, tints, and shades, not to mention different intensities of color (pale).

But what I love most is the way you intwined the two. "Reveng is sweet/ When white./ It leaves a trail/ Of Black." I also like the way you alternate the capitalizations of black and white. Like they take turns at being the most prominant: nothing is ever fully bad or good; it depends on how you see it.

Anyway, great work. I said have fun, and you did.

(By the way, I also said, "Two CHARACTERS: Black and White".)

[Tory]

Ha ha, either will work ;) Black and White take on characters because they are the focus of the poem. They are, as you said, equal, but at the same time, there is more in the world than just Black and White. It is as if they are competing with each other, but neither will win because there is always more. Also, what about gray? I didn't actually mention gray, but gray is White and Black combined, so they are connected to each other even when they are trying to beat each other. They never will though, because there is more to color, to life. Ha ha ;)