"Lihim"

The Secret...

Be unbounded 

by the ways of the world.

Ignorance claims the dogma of men,

to qualify as the sheer pith of truth.

My thirst will then be quenched... 

recompensed.

If I drink new seas,

aged by decades through...

impossible barely built its name...

so, I am bold to say, 

“I have lived.”

Things I might gain, 

I am proud to give.

Then,

I would count it as priceless.

My own blood could not suffice,

even all humanity’s sacrifice;

diamonds, gold...

even the ultimate prize:

the rarest of them all,

of which all pirates despise.

Although, 

this poem may be derived

from Poe’s letter to his valentine,

hope you’ll find the key to every line.

As you can see, 

this poem is truly mine.

Reviews

[Katy]

Your writing skills are simply amazing! Loved reading your work

[L.C. Jarrette]

oh i don't know about that...i'm still learning. thanks for reading katy!
:)

[L.C. Jarrette]

I'd like to thank sir Richard for helping me with this poem. Thank you very much sir for teaching me. May the Father bless you for being so generous in sharing your wisdom to us.

[Richard🖌]

Lihim, hinahangaan ko ang iyong mga tula sa maliwanag na mga paraan ng pag-init na hindi ko masahas na sabihin sa mundo.

Lady LC,
I have some thoughts on this one that might interest you, and if you care to, message me for details.
Yes, I thought it seemed familiar, and Poe would be quite proud of you, I am sure, in sheer enjoyment of how you've utilized his nuances to express such a powerfully vivid message that is, undoubtedly, yours.

A brilliant piece from your fertilely creative mind and imagination, for all to enjoy and reap benefit from … thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard : )

[L.C. Jarrette]

hello sir. i'm done editing it. thank you very much for your help! :)

[Richard🖌]

It's an honor, LC, to help a blossoming poetess … anytime! : )

[apennylate]

What... Jarrette... This is jaw-dropping... No... No seriously... I learned a few things reading this, and I continue to re-read it... I could not be more surprised... This is an epic level of detailed metaphorical and image-driven regale... I am literally speechless from how good it is, your rhyming is as tight as your breath control... Unique and utterly splendid... Who better to learn from, then Poe... Masterfully penned... Seriously...

[L.C. Jarrette]

hehe...thanks sir!!! :) i'm happy to see you here again!

[apennylate]

Thank you! Sorry... Was gone for a while...! Glad to be back

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Yes ... you do 'own' this composition - strong imagery, flow and creative!

Mahusay na tula :-)

[L.C. Jarrette]

ha?! pilipino po kayo?
:D

[L.C. Jarrette]

ahmm, are you a filipino writer sir? or maybe not...
:) sorry my bad.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

I'm a Canadian living in England - but have some basic knowledge of languages! Thanks how I new 'Lihim' meant 'secret' ..

[L.C. Jarrette]

oh,lol...i thought you were a filipino writer. haha! i was about to ask you if i could join your group/company if ever you had one.

[Elizabeth]

another great poem!! my favorite lines-
"I enough, am bold to say, “I have lived.”
Things I might gain, I am proud to give
Then I would count it as priceless
My own blood could not suffice
Even all humanity’s sacrifice;"
Great read!

[L.C. Jarrette]

those are my favorite lines too! i'm glad you liked it! thank you for reading DarkMist...

[Elizabeth]

It was my pleasure!

[emipoemi]

Solemn and profound on many levels. A gem that I should say might take a few reads to really piece together, but it has a wonderful flow and fantastic imagery. Well done!

[L.C. Jarrette]

thanks for the visit emipoemi...

[emipoemi]

the pleasure was all mine....

[Raven Moonchild]

(applauds) BRILLIANT!!!! :D Deep, dark, and a mention of Poe. I LOVE IT!!!!!

[L.C. Jarrette]

hihi...thanks rachel