"Nocturnal Ensemble"

"The Carnival of the Animals"

                              

                     Termites

                             chatter  

                               hitting

                                typewriters

                                Neon tails

                                  of

                                tiny-winged     

                                lanterns  

                                flutter

                                My Gemelina,      the Black foxes

                                roost                  singing sopranos

                                Giggling            Jiminy wonders

                                “Who”              acoustics in vibrato

                               Hear Tom          Cat’s melancholic song,

                               As the               bullfrogs play along       

                               Tiny swords       pierce my skin,       

                               Concertmaster  graces the stage again

                               Then cage owns core in my own Versailles

                               Savoring myriad notes while I lay rest

                                Illuminate the hall by the moonlit glee

                                 As the moon its maestro in honeyed

                                          Beethoven symphony

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Nocturnal Ensemble'
L.C.Jarrette,
I found this ode to the concert of nature to be very lovely.
Many a time I have been smitten by it's beauty
as well. The format really gives it more vibrancy.
'Neon tails
of
tiny-winged
lanterns
flutter'
The whole poem is just magical!

Blessings,
Kathy

[Hope]

Well this is really unique Jarrette:)
I enjoyed reading this.
And the way you wrote is amazing.
Thanks for sharing:)

[Decidious wind]

I love the structure of the poem makes it look like a piano which really brings out the meaning

[emipoemi]

WOW!!! Aesthetically pleasing, poetically pleasing, and a musicality that suits it well. Two notes:

1. "flutters" should be "flutter" since it's in reference to "lanterns" not "My Gemelina"

2. .......you begin in present, but you switch to past with the bullfrogs and then switch back to present again (why?).

Well done overall!

[L.C. Jarrette]

wait, i'll check it again.haha!

[L.C. Jarrette]

oh yeah! ahaha...

[L.C. Jarrette]

there...all done! thank you very much emipoemi...

[emipoemi]

with pleasure

[L.C. Jarrette]

i really like the tiny swords - they're mosquitoes by the way...

[Elizabeth]

the poem is great! and the fact that the words are shaped like a saxophone is a very nice idea. really love it!

[L.C. Jarrette]

it also looks like a pipe.haha! thanks for reading darkmist..

[Ethan]

Hmmm, as a cellist Im a sucker for anything having to do with the Carnival of the Animals. Nicely done :)

[L.C. Jarrette]

hehe..thanks ethan

[Ethan]

No problem

[L.C. Jarrette]

well,i tried my best to make it look like a saxophone...happy reading!