"Goddess of Gold"

"The Famous Mangifera"

Enthralled by this alluring sight,

Locals slaver from my sultry delight

Glossy laurels of evergreen,

Living embodiment of a queen

In the tropics I'm mostly adored,

Even dream up of tales and lore

Craves the taste of my luscious like

Tickles lips, this succulent ripe

Throughout the years, three decades old

Still covered with peels of gold.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"Goddess of Gold"
L.C. Jarrettem
Gold and greed go together in this poem. It's beauty and value are seen in humanity:
"Enthralled by this alluring sight,
Locals slaver from my sultry delight."
Then in the next stanza the silver and gold on a Christmas tree?
"Glossy laurels of evergreen,
living embodiment of a queen"
Tropics, with the many tales of Gold as well as whole people groups killed for gold.
"In the tropics I'm mostly adored,
even dream up of tales and lore
The tale goes on to simply name the drawing and cravings connected with this element.
Blessings, Oh, I clicked the picture and maybe it is about a tropical drink or a fruit? Hmmm...
Kathy

[emipoemi]

I doubt anyone actually understands what this poem is saying (forgive my boldness).....it's definitely profound in its imagery and it's flow is good, but I and I highly doubt anyone actually could piece this together, for some of the lines seem to paint something different than what you're actually going for; perhaps some punctuation is missing to help understand what's connected with that; perhaps some nouns, too? I don't know, I can only say this is the piece begins with a bang, and the right amount of cryptic mysticity to give readers a clear idea about what they're about to deal with, but then simply seems afterwards to flow too cryptically for their mentality....for the mentality of humankind, perhaps. Maybe I just don't know the reference, but the reference is not even particularly sorted out, and you also seemingly switch from 1st person narrative to 3rd person narrative and I for one just got lost when trying to figure out the story in the poem.....the theme, however, seems like a fun theme indeed, but I'm not sure whether you had the right handle on it.....(again, forgive my blunt honesty, if it offended you in any way).

[L.C. Jarrette]

no, it's fine..actually, i am more interested to listen. just keep giving me honest reviews okay? in that way i'll learn. i'm going to review my poem again to see what's lacking.
:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

great write,, syllable by syllable... and its good to read this kind of stuff especially here in this season ... my all time favorite mangoes... nicely written :)

[L.C. Jarrette]

i can really feel your support.haha! thank you!

[Hope]

This is a delicious poem Jarrette:)
The rhyme scheme is great:)
I enjoyed reading this!

[L.C. Jarrette]

delicious poem...lol.that's a good one.thanks neetha.

[Elizabeth]

I feel like eating mangoes right now. Wonderful imagery and a wonderful poem

[Surya]

Haha, That's sweet and cute....Well described..I liked it...:)

[L.C. Jarrette]

hehe...thank you for reading!

[L.C. Jarrette]

- Mangoes -

i'm just hungry...
craving for mangoes.
happy reading!