"I'll Stand at the Edge of the Earth and Sky"

"I'll Stand at the Edge of the Earth and Sky"

A Poem by L.C. Jarrette
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"Beyond the horizon"

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Grab on the beams of hope, don't kiss goodbye,
When those pungent screams I hear, whips may wound 
I'll stand at the edge of the Earth and Sky.

This fate may be queried by lots of why's
A tempest scourge me with mordant boulders
Grab on the beams of hope, don't kiss goodbye.

Climbed summits,battled hail, those endless cries,
Engulfed by the quagmire see no escape
I'll stand at the edge of the Earth and Sky.

Crystal fragments of quartz catches your eye,
Scintillating rainbow spellbinds
Grab on the beams of hope, don't kiss goodbye.

Rammed beasts of Hades; wail your cries.
The scent of victory is here
Grab on the beams of hope, don't kiss goodbye,
I'll stand at the edge of the Earth and Sky.

© 2017 L.C. Jarrette


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"I'll Stand at the Edge of the Earth and sky"
L.C. Jarrette,
Each poetic metaphor and image is simply a unspoken
message of nature's voice to our inner reality.
You touched on several beauties!
I liked the following lines:
"A tempest scourge me with mordant boulders."
"Engulfed by the quagmire see no escape."
Then these two lines following, were just beautiful!
"Crystal fragments of quartz catches your eye."
and
"Scintillating rainbows spellbind."
Hopes song really sings here at the end:
Rammed beasts of Hades; wail your cries."
"The scent of victory is here."
"Grab on the beams of hope, don't kiss goodbye."
"Ill stand at the edge of the earth and sky."
Really well written and inspiring!
bless you much!
Kathy



Posted 6 Years Ago


Maybe I'm dense but I don't understand what the poem is trying to say.

But anyway, "Grab on the beam" sounds odd. Maybe "Grab onto the beams" or "Grab ahold of the beams" or "Grab the beams".

Posted 7 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

7 Years Ago

oh...i hope someday when you read it again you will finally understand what it says...
:)
Amazing piece. The beams of hope touching the horizon are worth standing on. The spirit of struggle and scent of victory can be seen in the nicely chosen diction and images. I liked it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

7 Years Ago

hello sir,glad to see you here.thank you very much for reading!
L.C. Jarrette

7 Years Ago

sir please add me as one of your friends...hehe :)
This poem is filled with beautiful phrases and I loved the message....


Posted 7 Years Ago


Such exciting imagery and such a lovely rythm!

Posted 7 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

7 Years Ago

thank you again for your kind words...
A little flame

7 Years Ago

Your welcome!
Wow, this is amazing. The repetition the spot on and the imagery is just perfect. Amazing poem

Posted 7 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

7 Years Ago

thank you darkmist...
The repetition is awesome! I loved it!
It enhances this amazing poem and engages the readers even more!
Fantastic poetry...
Keep it up

Posted 7 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

7 Years Ago

thank you..i try
This poem is absolutely fantastic and I can see this being the start of a book and a song. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Raven Moonchild

7 Years Ago

My bad,madame, I call guys and girls "dude".
L.C. Jarrette

7 Years Ago

it's okay..
Raven Moonchild

7 Years Ago

But hey........caramel,right? :)
I enjoyed this. The vocabulary is strong, the imagery is mind-gripping, the rhymes flow well, the syntax and grammar are spot-on, and, to top it all off, the font choices match the strength and intensity of the poem perfectly.
Along with the technical aspects, I also like how this piece could be interpreted in different ways by different readers. The theme of grasping for hope is clear, but the situation the characters are in is something left for the reader to decide. I interpreted it as two lovers enduring hard times.
I have one question: Did you derive this poem's structure from the Villanelle? It resembles it in many ways, but reads like a more loose, modern adaptation of the traditional form.

- William Liston

Posted 7 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

7 Years Ago

yes sir..you are correct - villanelle. i was thinking of trying to change my structure and then late.. read more
The scent of victory is here... Wail your cries, rammed beasts of Hades... A tempest scourge of riled mirth... Very powerful word-choice, coupled with strong emotion peppered throughout... Moving imagery... Triumphantly penned

Posted 7 Years Ago


L.C. Jarrette

7 Years Ago

too late! i already changed it. :D
L.C. Jarrette

7 Years Ago

no, it sounds way cooler.haha! thank you so much!!
apennylate

7 Years Ago

Oh... Well all right... I still liked it the other way... But I am glad that I was able to help... I.. read more

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