"time is running out of time"

"Every minute counts."

"time is running out of time"

What if time, is running out of time?

Hypothetically speaking...

What if the idea of time itself 

could cease one day?

If ever that this existing idea or concept 

might actually come to pass

then what do you think

will happen, to all of us?

This ridiculous theory 

may not come from a man 

of a sound mind,

but what if...what if...

What if the moment 

before the hands of time stops,

you've realized that you've thrown 

most of the things 

that matters to you the most.

And then...tick tock,

there it goes,

like a rare diamond 

that was never owned.

My dear, regret will be your friend

if you still have debts unpaid.

Spend the most with your loved ones

Carpe diem! Carpe diem! I say...

Then this mysterious phenomenon 

may be better left unsaid,

but there's that hypothetical question again - 

What if, what if, what if...

Reviews

[barleygirl]

The title of this reflects some amazing imagination & then your message supports this idea well. You've prodded the reader for awhile to build some curiosity about your idea, but then you go ahead & deliver some life lessons in the deal. I like it when a poem continues beyond the initial probe, as yours does well, digging deeper, which is what I like in a message. My only drawback was that it seemed you were a little repetitious toward the beginning on variations of the phrase: "what would happen?"

[L.C. Jarrette]

oh yeah...you're right.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

L.C. Jarrette,
"time is running out"
This is a concept which is complex and surly beyond me. I only know that life is composed of time. God has created all and can change His reference If He so chooses.
Time is grace in my opinion..we learn, struggle, have joy, etc-etc. If and when time ceases as it will then God being perfect and just has done what is perfect and just.
The question remains what will we do with the one who has created all including time? For God created the world and all that is and He died the perfect sacrifice that we would have perfect life.
Blessings,
Kathy

[incognito]

Very thoughtful. You posed a great problem to us, "what if time stops?" and it creates some open ended food for thought. My only critique, though, is it could be redrafted and reworded at points. for example "What if the idea that time itself could cease one day?" should probably be rephrased as "What if the idea Of time itself could cease one day?"

[L.C. Jarrette]

ah..yes, you're absolutely right.thank you very much for your corrections.really appreciate it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was a movie. Time stopped and no-one die. Create a problem. The Twilight zone. All of us at a stand-still. Would be deadly? I liked the thoughts and the questions create by the poetry. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[L.C. Jarrette]

thank you sir for taking the time to read my poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Raven Moonchild]

(applauds) My mind is blown away!!!! Do you know Stephen Hawking? lol This poem is incredible and really makes you think. :)

[L.C. Jarrette]

thanks. i'll be sure to finish reading your work. i have the time after all.

[Raven Moonchild]

lol No problem and thank you!! :)

[pia]

This was mind f*** omg i loved it xD
I could sense a crazy scientist guy in here !!
Unique and well written !!

[L.C. Jarrette]

"crazy scientist guy"i'll take it as a compliment.thanks for reading

[Najam Us Saher]

So unique and creative.....I loved your imagination and thoughts...

[L.C. Jarrette]

thank you..i appreciate your review

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[keith]

thought provoking premise ... well said

but time is the only continuance

[L.C. Jarrette]

oh, i thought you haven't read this one yet. haha! thank you for reading it DarkMist. i will check out some your work as well.

[Elizabeth]

wow! wonderful poem, reminds me of all the things that i take for granted. i really love the concept of time running out of time. you've got me thinking...