Kaleidoscope

Kaleidoscope

Rainbow puddles fall

beneath my feet

a soaring rain drop

changing thoughts and hearts

a disarray of confusion

that worsens with time

till it doesn’t know

where it began

where it starts

when kaleidoscope slides

tangle up inside themselves

a mess of color and odd predicaments

but the first rain drop’s still there

underneath a mess of chaotic patterns

a delicate mirage, almost touchable

but completely unreachable

which one's right,

the source of the truth

 

I can’t tell

Reviews

[A.Lee]

This is really good. I have to disagree with the comment about the flow being off. I think it sounded great. Your word choice and the rhythm were woven together perfectly. Well done.

[Miss Coral]

Beautiful imagery, and I personally really liked the flow- it fit with the material of the poem. I DO think that I would leave some words uncapitalized, but that, of course, it up to you. Overall, great job!

[slemonade]

The wording was awesome, as was the imagery. The overall enjambment of the poem was great as well.
The flow, however, could use some work. The capitals in the beginning makes me want to pause before each line. Maybe only use capitals where you would use a period. Or better yet, don't use any capitals. Play around with that to see what works.
Otherwise, I loved it. Excellent work. :D

[Manda]

this was awesome